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What are advantages and disadvantages of telephone

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Today is the age of communication. As a result, nowadays people do their works by phone such as sharing their photos on social networks, taking online classes, paying bills, etc. This magical device has attracted many people's attention and we rarely see anyone uses telephone. Day by day the number of people who use telephone is increasing so some young people have become addicted to it. But what is the reason? In my opinion the main reason can be feeling alone. Therefore, some people specially young people and teenagers want to make their mind busy with different type of sites and social net works. This can be lead to being away from real world and it's problems. On the other hand, there are a lot of people who have online job and earn money by phone. In conclusion, telephone is a practical device and how to use it depends on your peaonality and mindset.
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type of sites and social net works. This can be lead to being away from real world and it's problems.
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IELTS essay What are advantages and disadvantages of telephone

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  American English
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154 words
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