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well, as I said before I am sophomor at academy

well, as I said before I am sophomor at academy 73PP6
well, as I said before I am sophomor at academy. Actually when I went to college, I have decided to find a part-time job to earn a little pocket money, and experience it for yourself. how blessed I am to have a job that it is servicce staff at a coffee shop near my house. Although it is not lucrative income, I still feel happy because there are very friendly colleagues here. I spend 5 hour doing the part –time job. However, I don’t only have income what I earn as a waitress, but also The part-time job serving this cafe allows me to have a lot of contact with customers, especially foreign customers. This trains me to be the most confident communicator and my English skills also increase significantly. So I preference for this job over other job.
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at academy. Actually when I went to college, I have decided to find a part-time
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to earn a
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pocket money, and experience it for yourself.
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friendly colleagues here. I spend 5
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, I don’t
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serving this
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a lot of
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IELTS essay well, as I said before I am sophomor at academy

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
139 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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