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Weigh problems. Solution?

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Along the years in some countries there has been some changes in people diet that affects their health status. In order to that, some people have gain weight. In this essay I am going to discuss both the problem and the potential solution. Firstly in this area of speed everything should be done in a very fast and productive way. That means some people may skip the sport program in order to work more or they find physical activities unimportant. Moreover, some of the citizen may try to save money and because fast food it is very cheap they prefer it more than other meals. Secondly, technology has incresed a lot in the past few years and many workers have started to work from home. This means that their level of interest on how they look or how they behave has a decresed way. Also, many of this generation have some mental disorter as anxiety, bulimia, depresion that lead to an uncontrol appetited. As a results they start having health problems. As a potential solution people should try first to realise the danger behind getting fat. A lot of organs as liver, stomach, heart can be damagged by an unhealthy diet. Also sport is very important not just for keeping a person fit but also to train the blood to circulate faster and oxygenate the brain. As a result, people thinking is clearer, faster and more efficient. Last but not the least, junk food do not provide vitamines and nutritions and the body is band crom energy and vitalities. In conclusion, in order to have a healthy lifestyle people should do more sports and eat unprocessed food. For a long life many of citizen should consider changing the bad habbits and be more careful with themselves.
Along the years in
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countries there has been
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changes
in
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diet that affects their health status. In order to that,
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some
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people
have gain weight. In this essay I am going to discuss both the problem and the potential solution.

Firstly
in this area of speed everything should
be done
in a
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very
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fast
and productive way. That means
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some
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people
may skip the sport program in order to work
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more or
they find physical activities unimportant.
Moreover
,
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some of the
citizen may try to save money and
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because
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fast
food it is
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cheap
they prefer it more than other meals.

Secondly
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a lot in the past few years and
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workers have
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to work from home. This means that their level of interest on how they look or how they behave has a
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decresed
way.
Also
,
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of this generation have
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mental
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as anxiety, bulimia,
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depresion
that lead to an
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uncontrol
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appetited
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As
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a results
they
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having health problems.

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a potential solution
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should try
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the
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behind getting
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organs as liver, stomach, heart can be
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damagged
by an unhealthy diet.
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Also
sport is
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important
not
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for keeping a person fit
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also
to train the blood to circulate faster and oxygenate the brain.
As a result
,
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people
thinking is clearer, faster and more efficient. Last
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not the least, junk food do not provide
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vitamines
and
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nutritions
and the body is band
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crom
energy and
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vitalities
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In conclusion
, in order to have a healthy lifestyle
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should do more sports and eat unprocessed food. For a long life
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many
of citizen should consider changing the
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bad
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habbits
and be more careful with themselves.
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IELTS essay Weigh problems. Solution?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
296 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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