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Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do agree or disagree?

Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. 85amB

It is argued that rich nations ought to allow greater numbers of forced migrant pass their borders and give them humanitarian relief. I completely agree with this opinion because it is morally a correct thing to do and it will also help their economy in the long term. To start, refugees are fleeing their homeland because of war and famine. This means that many of these people will die or come to serious harm if they are not accepted by affluent nations, and it is therefore morally imperative that they allow them in. However, if they do not shelter and feed them they would be responsible for many deaths and terrible suffering. For example, migrants from Syria are escaping a brutal war and this is the reason why Germany and other European countries have decided to grant hundreds of thousands of them asylum. As far as host countries are concerned in terms of welcoming plenty of refugees, thousands of extra people coming into a country will also help boost the economy. This is because there will be more young workers available and they will, in turn, pay tax and also buy goods and services in that country. They may need extra financial support in the beginning, but this will be paid back many times if they stay and work. For example, millions of Vietnamese people were forced to leave their homeland in 1970s and many of them have established thriving businesses in the USA which pay billions of dollars in tax every year. In conclusion, refugees should be accepted with open arms by financially strong countries because it is the right thing to do on moral/ethical grounds and it will also benefit the host countries monetarily in the future.

It is argued
 that rich nations ought to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
 greater numbers of forced migrant pass their borders and give them humanitarian relief. I completely This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 with this opinion This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it is morally
 a correct thing to do and it will also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 their economy in the long term.

To This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiate
start
, refugees are fleeing their homeland This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of war and famine.

This means that This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 of these This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :pass away
die
 or This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 to serious harm if they are not This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:admissible
accepted
 by affluent nations, and it is therefore
morally
 imperative that they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
allow
 them in. However
, if they do not shelter and feed them they would be responsible for This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 deaths and terrible suffering. For example
, migrants from Syria are escaping a brutal war and this is the reason why Germany and other European You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 have decided to grant hundreds of thousands of them asylum. “As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
 far as host You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
are concerned
 in terms of welcoming This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
plenty
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphof.of!of?of:of,of;
of


This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterRefugees
refugees
, thousands of extra This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 coming into a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
 will also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :assistassistance
help
 boost the economy. This is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 there will be more young workers Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).available, and
available and
 they will, in turn, pay tax and also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :productscommoditiesmerchandises
goods
 and services in that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
. They may need extra financial support in the beginning, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 this will be paid
 back This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 times if they stay and work. For example
, millions of Vietnamese This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
were forced
 to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :depart
leave
 their homeland The article is probably missing here: "in the 1970s".in the 1970s
in 1970s
 and This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 of them have established thriving businesses in the USA which pay billions of dollars in tax every year.

In conclusion
, refugees should be This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:admissible
accepted
 with open arms by financially
 strong

countries This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it is the right thing to do on moral/ethical grounds and it will

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterAlso
also
 benefit the host You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
monetarily
 in the future. 