Search
Vocabularying
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

Wealthy countries must accept more refugees do you agree or disagree

Wealthy countries must accept more refugees Vrbr3

Nowadays, Richest countries suffer from more refugees that they come to them in order to benefit from their resources. However, this may affect the original people live in those countries in different ways such as economic and cultural. So, I couldn't agree more that wealthy countries accept all new comers. Otherwise, they can just open immigration for skilled workers they need with legally acceptable terms. Firstly, I will discuss the economic side that may affect those countries such as budget. Surely this will take from their budget and drop them into obstacles in the long run. For instance, they may have the ability to lend money but if it is over excess this may have a harmful effect and the lend will transfer to borrow. Secondly, I will go through the cultural side that may be unclear to a lot of people discussing the same problem. Therefore, I will put highlight on that side. Strangers may not have the ability to respect the habits and cultural shape of the new country that they will come to it. For this reason, they might hurt the original habitants intentionally by breaking their rules or disrespect it and this may lead to a negative environment to live in. To sum up, I believe that wealthy countries should support other developing countries with food and money in order to survive but without affect their life or without accepting more refugees because in that case it sounds like invasion to those wealthy countries and later It will be difficult to overcome this disaster

Nowadays, A determiner is probably missing here: "the Richest".The Richest
Richest
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 suffer from more refugees that they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 to them in order to benefit from their resources. However
, this may affect the original This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 in those You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 in This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 ways such as economic and cultural. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
, I couldn't This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquiesce
agree
 more that wealthy You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 accept all Did you mean "newcomers"?newcomers
new comers
. Otherwise
, they can This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:merely
just
 open immigration for skilled workers they need with legally
 acceptable terms.

Firstly
, I will discuss the economic side that may affect those You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 such as budget. Surely
 this will take from their budget and drop them into obstacles in the long run. For instance
, they may have the ability to lend money This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 if it is over excess this may have a harmful effect and After 'the', do not use a verb. Make sure that the spelling of 'lend' is correct. If 'lend' is the first word in a compound adjective, use a hyphen between the two words. Note: This error message can occur if you use a verb as a noun, and the word is not a noun in standard English.
the lend
 will transfer to borrow.

Secondly
, I will go through the cultural side that may be unclear to This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
a lot of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 discussing the same problem. Therefore
, I will put highlight on that side. Strangers may not have the ability to respect the habits and cultural shape of the new You use this word too often, consider replacing it withrusticbucolichomeyagrarianprovincial
country
 that they will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approacharrive
come
 to it. For this reason
, they might hurt the original habitants intentionally
 by breaking their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :requirements
rules
 or disrespect it and this may lead to a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 environment to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 in.

To sum up, I believe that wealthy You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 should support other developing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 with food and money in order to survive This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 without affect their Did you mean "lives"?lives
life
 or without accepting more refugees This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
in that case
 it sounds like invasion to those wealthy You use this word too often, consider replacing it withlandpeopleregioncommunitysocietystate
countries
 and later It will be difficult to overcome this disaster