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Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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Weather materialistic possession and sure contentment to individual or not is a matter of intense debate globally. However, I believe that happiness does not relay on individuals economic status as this is a matter to be debated in the light of several factor which will be discussed in the following paragraphs before a reasonable conclusion can be drawn. the first and foremost factor associated to it is that if a personality have ample wealth then that individual needs a life in the state of stress and commences suffering from emotional trauma due to social estrangement by boycotting societal members.
Weather materialistic possession and sure contentment to individual or not is a matter of intense debate globally.
However
, I believe that happiness does not relay on individuals economic status as this is a matter to
be debated
in the light of
Possible agreement error. The noun factor seems to be countable; consider using: "several factors".
several factor
which will
be discussed
in the following paragraphs
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
a reasonable conclusion can
be drawn
.

This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
the
first
and foremost factor associated to it is that if a personality have ample wealth then that individual needs a life in the state of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
and commences suffering from emotional trauma due to social estrangement by boycotting societal members.

IELTS essay Wealth does not necessarily guarantee happiness. with this statement.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
99 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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