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Many products that we buy are made in other countries discuss the advantages and disadvantages

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It is observed that most people use electronic devices, branded cloth, furniture and mobile phones from different countries. In this case we can develop our relation with other countries, on the contrary I believe that it can effect on local market. The reason is that if we buy imported things like electronic device, branded clothes than we can't promote our local market. Moreover, peoplefound to buy branded rather than local things and then most of small or large business will be shut down due to low scale. In Pakistan, mostly people tend to buy imported items, that's why investors don't plant a factory in Pakistan. The main advantage is that, if people buy different things from other countries, it will be more reliable and long lasting things. Moreover we can enhance our trade with other countries. By this way we can improve our economy as well. Despite this mostly people don't buy these things because of expensive prices.
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use
electronic devices, branded cloth, furniture and mobile phones from
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different
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countries
.
In this case
we can develop our relation with other
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countries
,
on the contrary
I believe that it can effect on local market.

The reason is that if we
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buy
imported things like electronic device, branded clothes than we can't promote our local market.
Moreover
,
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peoplefound
to
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buy
branded
rather
than local things and then most of
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small
or large business will
be shut
down due to low scale. In Pakistan,
mostly
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people
tend to
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buy
imported items, that's why investors don't plant a factory in Pakistan.

The main advantage is that, if
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people
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buy
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different
things from other
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countries
, it will be more reliable and
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long lasting
things.
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Moreover
we can enhance our trade with other
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countries
. By this way we can
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improve
our economy
as well
. Despite this
mostly
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people
don't
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buy
these things
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because
of expensive prices.
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IELTS essay Many products that we buy are made in other countries discuss the advantages and disadvantages

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  American English
3 paragraphs
158 words
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