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We should rely on our traditional education

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We all know that computers can do certain things much faster and more efficiently than humans. In fact, much of our life today depends on what computers do for us. Now, the emergence of artificial intelligence, or AI, is expected to take us to a new level of life. One way to define AI is that it’s an ability of a machine to perform tasks that require human intelligence such as speech recognition and visual perception. This is why AI robots can respond to people telling them to do certain tasks or identify objects on their own. With the ability to process a massive amount of data in a matter of seconds, AI is expected to be useful in a number of fields, from automated driving, language translation to medical care. In the field of nursing care, for example, an AI-based sensor can be used to monitor the health conditions of patients in nursing homes 24 hours a day. Caretakers can rely on the sensor which detects anything unusual and immediately notifies them. AI is also expected to be highly beneficial in enhancing security in our everyday lives. Facial recognition in particular has been adopted by many organizations as a way to verify people’s identities. The machine recognizes facial features of a person and compares the information to its existing data about the person. If the two sets of data match, the person is verified. In this way, AI not only identifies people who want to be correctly identified, but it can help catch criminals by identifying those who are wanted by police. The matching can be done instantly with high accuracy, even a person wearing a face mask or sunglasses can be identified now. While AI benefits our lives in many ways, some people see it as a threat to humanity. McKinsey Global Institute predicts that 40 to 160 million women worldwide may be required to change their jobs by 2030. As we have already seen many clerical tasks being replaced by machines, occupations such as secretaries, receptionists and bookkeepers are more likely to be lost to robots and machines. According to their data, 72% of clerical jobs in advanced countries are held by women. Another group that is likely to be affected is the young generation. This is because many young people tent to get their first jobs as cashiers and servers which are routine-based, and generally do not require much experience. These types of jobs are at a high risk of automation. Is AI going to have an influence on the field of art as well? In 2014, a group of experts in the fields of data science and art history began working on a project titled The Next Rembrandt. It was an attempt to bring Rembrandt van Rijn, a world-famous Dutch artist from the 17th century, back to life by creating a new painting based on the data of his346 artworks. They collected data, analyzed patterns, and let the computer create a new painting that could possibly pass as something made by Rembrandt himself. This project, completed in 2016 startled the world, as the work looked exactly like a real Rembrandt’s painting. Whether or not AI can create art is still debatable, but this project has shown the possibilities of what we can do with data. So what should we expect next? There is no doubt that AI technology will continue to grow and surprise us in many years to come. Some jobs will be lost in the process, but at the same time, such technology is expected to generate new kinds of jobs and business opportunities. It’s up to us to decide whether we adapt or give in to changes.
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efficiently
than humans. In fact, much of our life
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depends on what computers do for us.
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, the emergence of artificial intelligence, or AI, is
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expected
to take us to a
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new
level of life.

One way to define AI is that it’s an ability of a
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machine
to perform tasks that require human intelligence such as speech recognition and visual perception. This is why AI robots can respond to
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people
telling them to do certain tasks or identify objects on their
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own
. With the ability to process a massive amount of
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data
in a matter of seconds, AI is
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expected
to be useful in a number of
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fields
, from automated driving, language translation to medical care. In the
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field
of nursing care,
for example
, an AI-based sensor can be
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used
to monitor the health conditions of patients in nursing homes 24 hours a day. Caretakers can rely on the sensor which detects anything unusual and immediately notifies them.

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also
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expected
to be
highly
beneficial in enhancing security in our everyday
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lives
. Facial recognition
in particular
has
been adopted
by
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many
organizations as a way to verify
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people’s
identities. The
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machine
recognizes facial features of a
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person
and compares the information to its existing
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data
about the
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person
. If the two sets of
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match, the
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is verified
. In this way, AI not
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help
catch criminals by identifying those who
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by police. The matching can
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instantly
with high accuracy, even a
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person
wearing a face mask or sunglasses can
be identified
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now
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people
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it as a threat to humanity. McKinsey Global Institute predicts that 40 to 160 million women worldwide may
be required
to
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change
their
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jobs
by 2030. As we have already
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seen
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many
clerical tasks
being replaced
by
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machines
, occupations such as secretaries, receptionists and bookkeepers are more likely to
be lost
to robots and
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machines
. According to their
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data
, 72% of clerical
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jobs
in advanced countries
are held
by women. Another group
that is
likely to be
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affected
is the young generation. This is
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young
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tent to
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first
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as cashiers and servers which are routine-based, and
generally
do not require much experience. These types of
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jobs
are at a high
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risk
of automation.

Is AI going to have an influence on the
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field
of art
as well
? In 2014, a group of experts in the
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fields
of
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science and art history began working on a project titled The
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Rembrandt. It was an attempt to bring Rembrandt van
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, a world-
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famous
Dutch artist from the 17th century, back to life by creating a
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new
painting based on the
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data
of his346 artworks. They collected
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data
, analyzed patterns, and
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let
the computer create a
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painting that could
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this project has shown the possibilities of what we can do with data.

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what should we
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IELTS essay We should rely on our traditional education

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
615 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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