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We are often taught to work hard for a better life. What do an individual consider a better life?

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We are often taught to work hard for a better life. What does an individual consider a better life? Is it having enough money to buy necessities, or being happy in any circumstances? Whatever the answer, the concept of a better life is relative. There will always be people who are happier than you with less money, and people who are unhappier even with sufficient income. One might earn good wages by working hard, however, this has a little to do with happiness or better life. Overtime luxury tends to become necessities. In other words, what we have now is taken for granted and we desire new things. When we fulfil those desires, they become part of our daily life and we aspire for more. For instance, a child works hard to get a good education, which will eventually result in a competitive salaried job. They feel elated, however, for a period. Then they feel the pressure to get a promotion, to climb up the social ladder, or, to earn more wage, and they work harder thinking eventually one or the other will lead to a better life. Then the cycle keeps repeating. Unknowingly, they are now part of a vicious cycle that has consumed many people like themselves. Our generation is not the only victim, our ancestors were also a casualty. During the agricultural revolution, human became farmers from hunter gatherers. We might believe that was for their betterment, now they are much more secure from the wild animals and have more readily available food, for which they foraged for hours every day. This was the histories biggest fraud. A typical hunter gathers would work for five hours a day, gathering food, and if they scored a big game like a Bison, they would go on for days without eating or doing anything at all. In contrast, a farmer had to work long days to keep their crops healthy, removing weeds or planting new crops. Then why did our ancestors choose this lifestyle? The answer is the vicious cycle, humans are incapable of fathoming the full consequences of their decisions. They thought if they word a little harder growing wheat than foraging, they will have plenty of food throughout the year plus they do not have to put their life in danger while hunting animals. They started working hard in farming, now they were settled so they thought about expanding families. As a result, they had a lot more mouths to feed, so they started working hard to grow more crops. They had more possessions compared to hunter gatherers, which resulting in more time spend maintaining them. Consequently, they were now working harder than any humans in history. In the past, our ancestors were allured by availability of food and security, we are tempted by money and social status, our future generation might be for hunger for power, who knows. What history has taught us is, Everyone was stuck in this cycle, however, we more than anyone, and working harder does not necessarily mean a better life.
We are
often
taught to
work
hard
for a
better
life
. What does an individual consider a
better
life
? Is it having
enough
money to
buy
necessities, or being happy in any circumstances? Whatever the answer, the concept of a
better
life
is relative. There will always be
people
who are happier than you with less money, and
people
who are unhappier even with sufficient income. One might earn
good
wages by
working
hard
,
however
, this has a
little
to do with happiness or
better
life.

Overtime luxury tends to become necessities.
In other words
, what we have
now
is taken
for
granted and
we desire new things. When we fulfil those desires, they become part of our daily
life and
we aspire for more.
For instance
, a child works
hard
to
get
a
good
education, which will
eventually
result in a competitive salaried job. They feel elated,
however
, for a period. Then they feel the pressure to
get
a promotion, to climb up the social ladder, or, to earn more wage, and they
work
harder
thinking
eventually
one or the other will lead to a
better
life
. Then the
cycle
keeps
repeating.
Unknowingly
, they are
now
part of a vicious
cycle
that has consumed
many
people
like themselves.

Our generation is not the
only
victim, our ancestors were
also
a casualty. During the agricultural revolution, human became farmers from
hunter gatherers
. We might believe that was for their betterment,
now
they are much more secure from the wild animals and have more
readily
available
food
, for which they foraged for hours every day. This was the histories
biggest
fraud. A typical hunter gathers would
work
for five hours a day, gathering
food
, and if they scored a
big
game like a Bison, they would go on for days without eating or doing anything at all.
In contrast
, a farmer had to
work
long days to
keep
their crops healthy, removing weeds or planting new crops. Then why did our ancestors choose this lifestyle? The answer is the vicious
cycle
, humans are incapable of fathoming the full consequences of their decisions. They
thought
if they word a
little
harder
growing wheat than foraging, they will have
plenty
of
food
throughout the year plus they do not
have to
put their
life
in
danger
while hunting animals. They
started
working
hard
in farming,
now
they
were settled
so
they
thought
about expanding families.
As a result
, they had a lot more mouths to feed,
so
they
started
working
hard
to grow more crops. They had more possessions compared to
hunter gatherers
, which resulting in more time spend maintaining them.
Consequently
, they were
now
working
harder
than any humans in history.

In the past, our ancestors
were allured
by availability of
food
and security, we
are tempted
by money and social status, our future generation might be for hunger for power, who knows. What history has taught us is, Everyone
was stuck
in this
cycle
,
however
,
we more
than anyone, and
working
harder
does not
necessarily
mean a
better
life
.
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IELTS essay We are often taught to work hard for a better life. What do an individual consider a better life?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
508 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Grammatical Range: 7.0
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