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Watching TV is harmful for the health

Watching TV is harmful for the health m851n

We all know that one of common activities is watching TV Everyone: both the adults and children love watching TV. But there are some negative effects. I completely agree with this statement because of two reasons. To begin with, many people are deeply rooted with spending time by watching TV which is disadvantageous for both mental and physical health. Scientific research has shown that this structure of eyesight among human beings connected with detrimental effects by TV. Further more watching TV can leads to obesity. On average, children in the US with 76 hours a week. Also the adults of not only this country, but also other countries with TV a lot too. As to why they become fatter and fatter. Conclusion. I hope that our children will watch TV less and read books more. Also I would like that the adults will watch TV less too. I believe that patents will recreate children with other activities such as chess, football, basketball and other useful activities for health.

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