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A story about a memory that end by he was very tired and exhausted, he was still relieved that he was saved.

A story about a memory that end by he was very tired and exhausted, he was still relieved that he was saved. WgG5K

Last month, he went hiking. On that day, the weather was very cold but he wore enough clothes to keep warm. After a few hours of climbing, he stopped to eat the food he brought. As soon as he sat down, he saw some small snowflakes falling. Not long after, the sky gradually darkened and more snow began to fall. He built an igloo to stay in and he draped a red scarf over the tent. An hour later, he heard the helicopter and the helicopter dropped a row of baskets for him to climb up. After he climbed to safety they started to lift him up. Although he was very tired and exhausted, he was still relieved that he was saved.

Last month, he went hiking. On that day, the weather was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :chillyfrosty
cold
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 he wore This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
enough
 clothes to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 warm. After a few hours of climbing, he This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :terminateceaseddiscontinued
stopped
 to eat the food he brought. As This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
 as he sat down, he This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
saw
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 snowflakes falling. Not long after, the sky gradually
 darkened and more snow began to fall. He built an igloo to stay Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).in, and
in and
 he draped a red scarf over the tent. An hour later, he heard the helicopter and the helicopter dropped a row of baskets for him to climb up. “After” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
After
 he climbed to safety they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :initiated
started
 to lift him up. Although he was This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
 tired and exhausted, he was still
 relieved that he was saved
. 