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watching many kinds of adversiting in the society

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Today we live in a globalised world and the development of global culture is often at the expense of local traditions. We are used to watching many kinds of adversiting as our society is buying all bout it. We are responsible for seeing in every corner of our cities around the world. Massive amounts of publicity that in the end are stimuli for us and generate the desire to want to have everything inmediately. But the reality is not that. The reality is not about what have each one, is not about how much money you have in your account or how much followers in your Facebook, Instagram or whatever app in our social media. Sometimes we believe that all the adversiting are true, It probably is however I think It is a goald with doble way and people only look the fisrt one, the only, the most confortable, the esiest, but dears it is not everything honest. For example, I am a communication student and our work is that everybody feels interested, excited and happy with our work that is bringing a global message and fast to catch as long as they do not feet forced to have to do whatever thing to take this fantastic and tempting proposal such as betting money, buying luxury things or encouraging children and young people to have everything easy. In my point of view I was checking many diferents goals to creat a better way to bring our knowledge and studys an other level. We could have more advantages of reaching our community in a healthy and safe way without obligations or encouraging dependencies with objectives that are not real. Not everyone may agree but it is a step to change.
Today
we
live
in a
globalised
world and the development of global culture is
often
at the expense of local

traditions. We are
used
to watching
many
kinds of
adversiting
as our society is buying all bout it. We are

responsible for seeing in every corner of our cities around the world. Massive amounts of publicity that in

the
end
are stimuli for us and generate the desire to want to have everything
inmediately
.
But
the reality

is not that. The reality is not about what have each one, is not about how much money you have in your

account or how
much
followers in your Facebook, Instagram or whatever app in our social media.

Sometimes
we believe that all the
adversiting
are true, It
probably
is
however
I
think
It is a
goald
with

doble
way and
people
only
look the
fisrt
one, the
only
, the most
confortable
, the
esiest
,
but
dears it is not

everything honest.
For example
, I am a communication student and our work is that everybody feels

interested, excited and happy with our work
that is
bringing a global message and
fast
to catch as long

as they do not feet forced to
have to
do whatever thing to take this fantastic and tempting proposal such

as betting money, buying luxury things or encouraging children and young
people
to have everything

easy.

In my point of view I was checking
many
diferents
goals to
creat
a better way to bring our knowledge and

studys
an other
level. We could have more advantages of reaching our community in a healthy and safe

way without obligations or encouraging dependencies with objectives that are not real. Not everyone

may
agree
but
it is a step to
change
.

IELTS essay watching many kinds of adversiting in the society

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
289 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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