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Viewing television is bad for childern development some people say that it is good for children.

Viewing television is bad for childern development some people say that it is good for children. pJ2Ym
It is often argue that, several individuals opinion that viewing television is harmful for children development. Whereas, a number of human believe that magical box has a some benefit on children. This essay will intend to analysis both the view along my prospective. On the one hand, there are many reasons why some people say that watching television is good for children. To explain it, kindles watching a right kind of show so they are increase a knowledge and better preform in academic subjects. According to research young children viewing television few week in education program high academic test achieve a better score. In example, In 21st era mostly all countries faced a Coronavirus and government imposed a lockdown so they are started a online classes on television for children. Thus, juveniles are do better in class as well as brain is intellectual development. On the other hand, there are certain drawbacks to watching a too much time on television for children. To elaborate it, youngsters spend a more time on magic box they suffer from some health related problems such as, set in front on screen bad for eye sight and causing a obesity. Nowadays, litter one never do any physical activities in fact the body is not healthier. For instance, well _ known newspaper headline more than developed nation adolescent instead on bad habits like as used a huge of drug and rubbery to show a bad kind of film on television and film dialogues is also used in real life. As a result, they are spoil a future very well. In conclusion, I believe that watching television is good for children. But, viewing a limit and parent should be select a good channel for babysitters related to education as we as, spend a quality time with them.
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argue that, several
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individuals
opinion that viewing
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television
is harmful for
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children
development.
“Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Whereas
, a number of human believe that magical box has a
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some
benefit on
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children
. This essay will intend to analysis both the view along my prospective. On the one hand, there are
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many
reasons why
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some
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people
say that watching
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television
is
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good
for
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children
. To
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explain
it, kindles watching a right kind of
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show
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so
they are increase a knowledge and better preform in academic subjects. According to research young
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children
viewing
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television
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few week
in education program high academic
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test
achieve a better score. In example, In 21st era
mostly
all countries faced a Coronavirus and
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government
imposed a lockdown
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so
they are
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started
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a
online classes on
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television
for
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children
.
Thus
, juveniles are
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do
better in
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class
as well
as brain is intellectual development.
On the other hand
, there are certain drawbacks to watching a too much time on
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television
for
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children
. To elaborate it, youngsters spend a more time on magic box they suffer from
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some
health related problems such as, set
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in front on
screen
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bad
for
This word is usually spelt together: "eyesight".
eye sight
and causing
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a
obesity. Nowadays, litter one never do any physical activities in fact the body is not healthier.
For instance
, well _ known newspaper headline more than developed nation adolescent
instead
on
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bad
habits like as
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used
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a huge of
drug and rubbery to
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show
a
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bad
kind of film on
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television
and film dialogues is
also
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used
in real life.
As a result
, they are spoil a future
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very
well.
In conclusion
, I believe that watching
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television
is
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good
for
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children
.
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But
, viewing a limit and parent should be select a
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good
channel for babysitters related to education as we as, spend a quality time with them.
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IELTS essay Viewing television is bad for childern development some people say that it is good for children.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
300 words
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