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Very few people who commit crime want to. They do it because they feel they have no choice. This is the reality of the situation, and it means that police and prisons are not relevant to reducing crime.

Very few people who commit crime want to. They do it because they feel they have no choice. This is the reality of the situation, and it means that police and prisons are not relevant to reducing crime. Ajgnn
It is widely argued that most criminals commit offences because there are no alternatives for them, so police and prisons have no effect on reducing crimes. I completely disagree with this view. It is undefining to make broad generalizations about the course of violation according to certain cases. However, it is true that some people violate laws because they are reduced to situations where they are unable to survive without doing so, such as stealing food out of extreme poverty, but this theory should not be applied to every case. On most occasions, people are motivated to illegally obtain something because their desire for it cannot be satisfied in decent ways. If we ascribe all the crimes to criminals’ failure to meet their basic needs, it cannot be explained why there are still high rates of robbery and theft in well-off societies. Therefore, it is not justifiable to say that a few people commit crimes of their own accord. On the other hand, force and prisons have been effective in dealing with wrongdoing in human history, and there are still no other feasible options. Police play an important role in law enforcement, and prisons have an effect on deterring criminals. Moreover, if it were not for these two government institutions, criminals would take to offences with abandon and society would fall into chaos. Only with the fear of being held accountable would potential culprits resort to legal ways to satisfy their desire. To conclude, it seems to me that offenders have other choices to live in besides committing offences, and police and lockup are highly relevant to reducing crime.
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argued that most
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criminals
commit
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offences
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because
there are no alternatives for them,
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so
police and prisons have no effect on reducing
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crimes
. I completely disagree with this view.

It is
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undefining
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make
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However
, it is true that
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some
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people
violate laws
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because
they are
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reduced
to situations where they are unable to survive without doing
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so
, such as stealing food out of extreme poverty,
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but
this theory should not
be applied
to every case. On most occasions,
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people
are motivated
to
illegally
obtain something
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because
their desire for it cannot
be satisfied
in decent ways. If we ascribe all the
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crimes
to
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criminals’
failure to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
their basic needs, it cannot be
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explained
why there are
still
high rates of robbery and theft in well-off societies.
Therefore
, it is not justifiable to say that a few
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people
commit
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crimes
of their
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own
accord.

On the other hand
, force and prisons have been effective in dealing with wrongdoing in human history, and there are
still
no other feasible options. Police play an
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important
role in law enforcement, and prisons have an effect on deterring
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criminals
.
Moreover
, if it were not for these two
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government
institutions,
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criminals
would take to
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offences
with abandon and society would fall into chaos.
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Only
with the fear of
being held
accountable would potential culprits resort to legal ways to satisfy their desire.

To conclude
, it seems to me that offenders have other choices to
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live
in
besides
committing
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offences
, and police and lockup are
highly
relevant to reducing
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crime
.
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IELTS essay Very few people who commit crime want to. They do it because they feel they have no choice. This is the reality of the situation, and it means that police and prisons are not relevant to reducing crime.

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269 words
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