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Using points and examples from the talk, explain the two types of animal navigation presented by the professor. v.1

Using points and examples from the talk, explain the two types of animal navigation presented by the professor. v. 1
The Film industry has grown significantly over the last few decades and some companies allocate a colossal budget to produce just one movie. Personally, I do not believe that the quality of the movie depends on how much money was spent on it. Rather, what matters are the storyline and the talent of the actors and other people associated with the movie. Producing a film is definitely a process which requires a lot of money. Costumes, cameras, make up and exotic locations are all components of a regular movie and for sure cost a fortune. However, producers overspend when producing a film and incur unnecessary expenses to add special effects expecting that in this way they will enrich the film. Yet these are not the key factors that determine if the movie is good enough or not. Firstly, the storyline plays the most vital role in the success of a film. If the script is not strong enough to attract the audience, making a film on it is undoubtedly fruitless and will have devastating results. Secondly, choosing the actors who suit the role they are playing is also imperative. Many film stars have become instrumental in producing legendary movies because of their talent and their incredible ability to enact the characters in the most realistic way. For example, movies of hugely popular actors like Tom Cruise become successful regardless of their storyline or budget. To conclude, although film production needs a huge chunk of money, it is not the key factor in making the film successful as the story, the acting and the direction are equally if not more important.
The Film industry has grown
significantly
over the last few decades and
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some
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companies
allocate a colossal budget to produce
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just
one
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movie
.
Personally
, I do not believe that the quality of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
depends on how much money
was spent
on it.
Rather
, what matters are the storyline and the talent of the actors and other
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
associated with the movie.

Producing a film is definitely a process which requires
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a lot of
money. Costumes, cameras,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
up and exotic locations are all components of a regular
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
and for sure cost a fortune.
However
, producers overspend when producing a film and incur unnecessary expenses to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
special effects expecting that in this way they will enrich the film.
Yet
these are not the key factors that determine if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movie
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
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enough
or not.

Firstly
, the storyline plays the most vital role in the success of a film. If the script is not strong
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to attract the audience, making a film on it is
undoubtedly
fruitless and will have devastating results.
Secondly
, choosing the actors who suit the role they are playing is
also
imperative.
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Many
film stars have become instrumental in producing legendary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
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because
of their talent and their incredible ability to enact the characters in the most realistic way.
For example
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
movies
of
hugely
popular actors like Tom Cruise become successful regardless of their storyline or budget.

To conclude
, although film production needs a huge chunk of money, it is not the key factor in making the film successful as the story, the acting and the direction are
equally
if not more
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important
.
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IELTS essay Using points and examples from the talk, explain the two types of animal navigation presented by the professor. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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