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Using locally manufactured products

Using locally manufactured products 55xdp
Some people believe that due to the rapid changes occurring in modern work places, it is better to employ younger than older people. I do not believe that this is the case. Some people believe that due to the rapid changes occurring in modern work places, it is better to employ younger than older people. I do not believe that this is the case. Some people believe that due to the rapid changes occurring in modern work places, it is better to employ younger than older people. I do not believe that this is the case.
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occurring in modern work places, it is better to employ younger than older
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that this is the case.
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Some
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people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that due to the rapid
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
occurring in modern work places, it is better to employ younger than older
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. I do not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that this is the case.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that due to the rapid
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
occurring in modern work places, it is better to employ younger than older
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. I do not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
believe
that this is the case.
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IELTS essay Using locally manufactured products

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
96 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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