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Using animals to test the safety of cosmetics or drugs used for medical reasons is never acceptable. to what extent do you agree with this statement? v.1

Using animals to test the safety of cosmetics or drugs used for medical reasons is never acceptable. v. 1
No one would argue that animals are widely used for the evaluation of medicines and cosmetics effects. This trend prompts a controversial topic whether this method is against animal right and moral obligations, thus should be banned or it is vital for the human health needed to be used. I adamantly disagree with the point of view that the usage of animals for medical purposes is never acceptable. I believe this method should be moderately used but strictly monitored. First and foremost, sustainable healthcare and cosmetics development will be achieved merely by this process. Without any doubt, drugs are indispensable for the survival of the humanity and it is an unavoidable fact that cosmetics are widely used in whole societies in today' s world as well. Accordingly, since the effectiveness of the wide range of these products cannot be evaluated on humans out of the life threating risks they might have, there would be no other alternatives rather than using animals. Therefore, there is a strong correlation between using animals as test subjects and the invention of new products. on the other hand, it is scientifically proved that anatomy of the human is far more complex than animals. Human body evolves through the time and myriads environmental factors have impacted it. therefore, the performance of some elements used in producing a specific drug can only assess in isolated species with simpler body functions. It should be stressed that for preserving animal rights, this process should be severely monitored by the government and related organization. there should be certain regulations regarding experimenting on animals. for instance, the British government introduced a law that has allowed pharmacy researchers to utilize animals as test subjects which are already suffering from an illness. In a nutshell, it is essential to make use of animals for creating and developing medicines and cosmetic products. Owing to the fact that some of these experiments can have human casualties. In addition, a numerous of these tests can only be conducted on animals with an uncomplex anatomy. However, in order to preserve animal rights, strict surveillance on these process should be regulated.
No one would argue that
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animals
are
widely
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used
for the evaluation of medicines and
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cosmetics
effects. This trend prompts a controversial topic whether this method is against
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animal
right and moral obligations,
thus
should
be banned
or it is vital for the
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human
health needed to be
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used
. I
adamantly
disagree with the point of view that the usage of
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animals
for medical purposes is never acceptable. I believe this method should be
moderately
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used
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but
strictly
monitored.

First
and foremost, sustainable healthcare and
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cosmetics
development will
be achieved
merely
by this process. Without any doubt, drugs are indispensable for the survival of the humanity and it is an unavoidable fact that
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cosmetics
are
widely
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used
in whole societies in
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today&
#039; s world
as well
.
Accordingly
, since the effectiveness of the wide range of these products cannot
be evaluated
on
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humans
out of the life
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threating
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risks
they might have, there would be no other alternatives
rather
than using
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animals
.
Therefore
, there is a strong correlation between using
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animals
as
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test
subjects and the invention of new products.

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on
the other hand, it is
scientifically
proved that anatomy of the
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human
is far more complex than
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animals
.
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Human
body evolves through the time and myriads environmental factors have impacted it.
therefore
, the performance of
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some
elements
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used
in producing a specific drug can
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only
assess in isolated species with simpler body functions.

It should be
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stressed
that for preserving
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animal
rights, this process should be
severely
monitored by the
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government
and related organization.
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there
should be certain regulations regarding experimenting on
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animals
.
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for
instance, the British
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government
introduced a law that has
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allowed
pharmacy researchers to utilize
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animals
as
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test
subjects which are already suffering from an illness.

In a nutshell, it is essential to
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make
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use
of
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animals
for creating and developing medicines and
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cosmetic
products. Owing to the fact that
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some
of these experiments can have
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human
casualties.
In addition
,
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a numerous of
these
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tests
can
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only
be conducted
on
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animals
with an
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uncomplex
anatomy.
However
, in order to preserve
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animal
rights, strict surveillance on these process should
be regulated
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Using animals to test the safety of cosmetics or drugs used for medical reasons is never acceptable. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
353 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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