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Universities should allocate the same amount of money to their sport activities as they allocate to their libraries. Do you agree or disagree?

Yes, I do feel that universities should have an equal budget for their libraries as well as _ sport activities. It is our general belief that a good player can not be _ good student and hence we restrict our children’s sport activities at college level. Moreover, an academic degree has much more value than sport activities which naturally compels students to focus more on their studies than their interest in sport. Most of the universities keep sports at last number of their priority list, because of which good players do not get enough facilities and equipments to improve their skills and eventually they loose their interest. Universities can play _ substantial role in shaping this upcoming talent by providing good trainers and equipments which is otherwise too expensive to afford. Also it will attract other students towards sports and inculcate importance of physical fitness in them. Universities should produce genious in all fields rather than only concentrating on progress of scholars. Hence, I feel that universities should allot equal amounts of money to liabrary as well as sport activities.
Yes, I do feel that
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universities
should have an equal budget for their libraries
as well
as _
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sport
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activities
. It is our general belief that a
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good
player can not be _
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good
student and
hence
we restrict our children’s
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sport
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activities
at college level.
Moreover
, an academic degree has much more value than
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sport
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activities
which
naturally
compels students to focus more on their studies than their interest in sport.

Most of the
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universities
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keep
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sports
at last number of their priority list,
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because
of which
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good
players do not
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get
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enough
facilities and equipments to
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improve
their
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skills
and
eventually
they loose their interest.
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Universities
can play _ substantial role in shaping this upcoming talent by providing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
trainers and equipments which is
otherwise
too expensive to afford.
Also
it will attract other students towards
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sports
and inculcate importance of physical fitness in them.

Universities should produce genious in all fields
rather
than
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only
concentrating on progress of scholars.
Hence
, I feel that
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universities
should allot equal amounts of money to liabrary
as well
as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sport
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
.
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IELTS essay Universities should allocate the same amount of money to their sport activities as they allocate to their libraries.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
180 words
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