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Unemployed qualified graduates

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Over the years, young people competing in the educational field with various types of backgrounds and interests. If we go around and ask one of them, we can hear different kind of jobs have been chosen. However, recent years, many medias and interviews are going around saying many qualified graduates nowadays are unemployed. In this essay, I will explain the factors of causing this problem and how can we address this situation. The main factor that I can come out with is, the requirement of some companies or businesses are too high for the fresh graduates. Even though, there are qualified for the jobs, the bosses needed at least 3 years of experience from them, and this is unreasonable. One way to solve this problem is, the university need to provide them internship program during the final year of their studies. This will ensure they got some experience before applying for jobs as well as making sure they will be graduated and prepared for the working world without any obstacles. One of other reason that can fell under this topic is the demand for the graduates are low in market. Some of them are seeking for companies with good salary offered, however this will never be achieved if there are too many of them fighting for the same jobs. In this case, we can take engineers as an example. Many young people graduate from this course with flying colors, but they hardly find the job due to underpayment from companies and lack of jobs can be applied. Companies need to revoke and change their policies to make sure that they pay their workers in pace with their level of education. All in all, the main reasons for unemployed qualified graduates are solely the responsibility of the bosses out there. Give more opportunities for them to shine in order to improve the quality of the businesses in future.
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competing in the educational field with various types of backgrounds and interests. If we go around and ask one of them, we can hear
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different
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, recent years,
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many
medias and interviews are going around saying
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many
qualified
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graduates
nowadays
are unemployed
. In this essay, I will
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explain
the factors of causing this problem and how can we address this situation.

The main factor that I can
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come
out with is, the requirement of
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some
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companies
or businesses are too high for the fresh
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graduates
.
Even though
, there
are qualified
for the
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jobs
, the bosses needed at least 3 years of experience from them, and this is unreasonable.

One way to solve this problem is, the university need to provide them internship program during the final
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year
of their studies. This will ensure they
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got
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some
experience
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before
applying for
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jobs
as well
as making sure they will
be graduated
and prepared for the working world without any obstacles.

One of other reason that can fell under this topic is the demand for the
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graduates
are low in market.
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Some
of them are seeking for
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companies
with
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good
salary offered,
however
this will never
be achieved
if there are too
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many
of them fighting for the same
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jobs
.
In this case
, we can take engineers as an example.
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Many
young
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people
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graduate
from this course with flying colors,
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but
they hardly find the
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job
due to underpayment from
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companies
and lack of
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jobs
can
be applied
.
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Companies
need to revoke and
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change
their policies to
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make
sure that they pay their workers in pace with their level of education.

All in all, the main reasons for unemployed qualified
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graduates
are
solely
the responsibility of the bosses out there. Give more opportunities for them to shine in order to
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improve
the quality of the businesses
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IELTS essay Unemployed qualified graduates

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
317 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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