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Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. v. 1
In some parts of the world, namely the USA, Britain and Australia, a person who is accused of a crime is judged in front of a jury of his peers. Unlike the American system in which, the defendant's criminal record is brought forth as imperative information that the jury needs to consider, in Britain and Australia those records remained sealed. While this has been the case for many years, some lawyers argue that the conventional system has to change. In order to come to a decision regarding this controversial subject, we must ask ourselves whether a person's past influence his future endeavours. In my humble opinion, the lawyers are correct and this current practice should be reformed. People who support the current paradigm state that by bringing criminal records forward the suspect will not receive a fair trial as his past will influence the conclusion of the jury. Moreover, some can argue that it is wrong to treat two people who are accused of the same crime differently just because they have different criminal records as our past cannot predict our future and by doing so we render the prospect of rehabilitation irrelevant. On the other hand, it seems to me that criminal records are part of the process of the trial as they are an evidence of the accused tendency toward criminal behaviour. Statistically speaking, it is highly probable that a person with a rich criminal record will act on his impulses and commit crime again. Imagine being a jury in a murder trial, wouldn’t you want to know everything about the defendant? I think that the recent documentary named "the jinx" can shed some light on this issue. It tells the story of a rich man who was the prime suspect in three murder trials but was never convicted. The movie reveals new facts about the case and shows that he actually was the killer of all three. I believe that this story goes a long way to show how important it is to see the big picture and come to an informed decision based on every bit of information available. In conclusion, I believe that a jury in a criminal case should receive every piece of information needed in order to facilitate their decision. I reckon that a defendant's criminal record should be considered an evidence for the trial and therefore, made available to the jury.
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of his peers. Unlike the American system in which, the defendant's
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forward the suspect will not receive a
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as his past will influence the conclusion of the
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as our past cannot predict our future and by doing
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we render the prospect of rehabilitation irrelevant.

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criminal
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records
are part of the process of the
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trial
as they are an evidence of the accused tendency toward
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criminal
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criminal
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will act on his impulses and commit crime again. Imagine being a
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jury
in a murder
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trial
, wouldn’t you want to know everything about the defendant?

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can shed
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light on this issue. It
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man
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was the prime suspect in three murder
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was never convicted. The movie reveals new facts about the case and
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that he actually was the killer of all three. I believe that this story goes a long way to
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to an informed decision based on every bit of information available.

In conclusion
, I believe that a
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jury
in a
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criminal
case should receive every piece of information needed in order to facilitate their decision. I reckon that a defendant's
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criminal
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record
should
be considered
an evidence for the
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trial
and
therefore
, made available to the
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IELTS essay Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. v. 1

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