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two types of health views

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There are two ideas about improving public health. One of them is increasing sports facilities however, others say that other measures are required. This is the thing that needs to be discussed, which view is the best. Firstly, for improving heath using from sports is not a bad idea. In nowadays most of the people does workouts for staying healthy and fit. However, in same time you should take care of your meals. For instance: you need to eat healthy things, eat plenty of fruit and vegetables in same time to drink water and take a lot of fresh air. As a sport we see in news and in social media that doctors and everyone tells that in a day you should walk at least 10000 steps. It is part of sport and it is important in our life. We can remember that our elders always tell us that in past there was no sport as nowadays, we were doing house works and gardening, this was our sport and we were healthier than people that is born newly. Moreover, sport is not enough for improving public health, it is good for staying healthy. Near it you should do many other thing. It can be sunlight, sand, eating less calories and not drinking any fizzy drinks and other thing. In conclusion, everyone now does most things wrong and when they talk about health, they are telling that sport is the best way, you can do it with sport but it is not like that. You should look after yourself and there are many ways for doing it.

There are two This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :thoughtsconceptsnotions
ideas
 about improving public health. One of them is increasing You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
 facilities however
, others say that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewalternativemore
other
 measures are required
. This is the thing that needs to be discussed
, which view is the best.

Firstly
, for improving heath using from You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
 is not a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evil
bad
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idea
. nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: "nowadays".Nowadays
In nowadays
 most of the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
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, in same time you should take care of your meals. For instance
: you need to eat healthy things, eat This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
plenty
 of fruit and vegetables in same time to drink water and take This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
a lot of
 fresh air. As a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sport
 we This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 in news and in social media that doctors and everyone This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :informs
tells
 that in a day you should walk at least 10000 steps. It is part of You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sport
 and it is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:vitalcriticalessential
important
 in our life. We can remember that our elders always This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :inform
tell
 us that in past there was no You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sport
 as nowadays, we were doing This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
 works and gardening, this was our Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).sport, and
sport and
 we were healthier than This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 that is born
newly
.

Moreover
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sport
 is not This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
enough
 for improving public health, it is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 for staying healthy. Near it you should do This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewalternativemore
other
 thing. It can be sunlight, sand, eating Did you mean "fewer calories"?fewer calories
less calories
 and not drinking any fizzy drinks and You use this word too often, consider replacing it withnewalternativemore
other
 thing.

In conclusion
, everyone This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
 does most things This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:incorrect
wrong
 and when they talk about health, they are telling that You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sport
 is the best way, you can do it with You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sport
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 it is not like that. You should look after yourself and there are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 ways for doing it. 