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Trapped an the cyclone at Texas

Dorothy who lived in a small farm in Texas, with her aunt Em and her uncle Henry, spending her time playing with her dog Toto. One day they figure out that they are trapped by a cyclone, it was huge and strength, gradually it took the shape of a funnel, Toto yelped and hide beneath her bed, he thought it was a save place to hide in, as soon as she can, Dorothy followed it. Even when she heard her uncle Henry yelling at her to get into the cellar, she couldn’t run and followed her dog immediately, she were scared and terrified. Soon she felt that the house is spending, they were on the top of the storm, she was worried about her aunt and uncle, she hoped that they are safe and sound in the cellar. She had passed out and was fast asleep, with Toto between her arms.
Dorothy who
lived
in a
small
farm in Texas, with her aunt Em and her uncle Henry, spending her time playing with her dog Toto. One day they figure out that they
are trapped
by a cyclone, it was huge and strength,
gradually
it took the shape of a funnel, Toto yelped and
hide
beneath her bed, he
thought
it was a save place to
hide
in, as
soon
as she can, Dorothy followed it. Even when she heard her uncle Henry yelling at her to
get
into the cellar, she couldn’t run and followed her dog immediately, she
were
scared and terrified.
Soon
she felt that the
house
is spending, they were on the top of the storm, she
was worried
about her aunt and uncle, she hoped that they are safe and sound in the cellar. She had passed out and was
fast
asleep, with Toto between her arms.
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IELTS essay Trapped an the cyclone at Texas

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
151 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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