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TPO41Do you agree or disagree? Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays. v.2

TPO41 Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays. v. 2
Throughout history, education has been one of the important factors in all civilized societies. Genuinely, it determines that how much our society is successful. Although a plethora of people hold the opinion that teachers were more appreciated in the past, others disagree with this point of view and believe that all nations are aware of this importance that teachers play extremely significant roles in the society and value their jobs. I, to a great extent, hold the former viewpoint. Among countless reasons, which can vindicate my point of view, I will mention the two most conspicuous ones through the following paragraphs. The first reason that juts out of my mind is about the fact that teachers would have received more money in the past. Indeed, their salaries were the same of other careers, such as architectures, engineers and so forth. In the contrary, their wages are lower than the average in the present time, and they have to work very hard to earn their livings. This means that societies and above of all governments do not pay any attention on them. In such a situation, people feel that teachers are not effective in the society and ignore their paramount role. The second and equally proof for this assertion is about this importance that a grate hosts of individuals were illiterate, and believed that in order to make their lives better, the presence of educators in the society is essential. However, by technology development human beings’ access to a hoard of information through the internet, social networks and many other similar means, has improved. Since most of people are more knowledgeable than the past, they deny the importance of education as well as educators. For instance, the noteworthy statistics revealed by a recently conducted research in the Massachusetts Institute of Technology shown that over 90 percent of high school students are not willing to attend their classes. In this survey theses students prefer to study their lessons by themselves and take part in online courses since they believe that in this way, not only can they enhance their information effectively but also this way of study is far more convenient. Consequently, learners do not appreciate teachers more than the past. To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that nowadays teachers are not acknowledged as much as they were in the past. This contention is due to the fact that not only are their social levels get worse but also the student are not interested to be taught by teachers.
Throughout history, education has been one of the
important
factors in all civilized
societies
.
Genuinely
, it determines that how much our
society
is successful. Although a plethora of
people
hold the opinion that
teachers
were more appreciated in the
past
, others disagree with this point of view and believe that all nations are aware of this importance that
teachers
play
extremely
significant roles in the
society
and value their jobs. I, to a great extent, hold the former viewpoint. Among countless reasons, which can vindicate my point of view, I will mention the two most conspicuous ones through the following paragraphs.

The
first
reason that juts out of my mind is about the fact that
teachers
would have received more money in the
past
.
Indeed
, their salaries were the same of other careers, such as architectures, engineers and
so
forth. In the contrary, their wages are lower than the average in the present time, and they
have to
work
very
hard
to earn their livings. This means that
societies
and above of all
governments
do not pay any attention on them. In such a situation,
people
feel that
teachers
are not effective in the
society
and
ignore
their paramount role.

The second and
equally
proof for this assertion is about this importance that a grate hosts of individuals were illiterate, and believed that in order to
make
their
lives
better, the presence of educators in the
society
is essential.
However
, by technology development human beings’ access to a hoard of information through the internet, social networks and
many
other similar means, has
improved
. Since most of
people
are more knowledgeable than the
past
, they deny the importance of education
as well
as educators.
For instance
, the noteworthy statistics revealed by
a recently conducted research
in the Massachusetts Institute of Technology shown that over 90 percent of high school students are not willing to attend their classes. In this survey
theses
students prefer to study their lessons by themselves and
take part
in online courses since they believe that in this way, not
only
can they enhance their information
effectively
but
also
this way of study is far more convenient.
Consequently
, learners do not appreciate
teachers
more than the past.

To
make
a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, we may draw the conclusion that nowadays
teachers
are not acknowledged as much as they were in the
past
. This contention is due to the fact that not
only
are their social levels
get
worse
but
also
the student are not interested to
be taught
by
teachers
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO41 Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they were nowadays. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
427 words
6.0
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