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tpo 54 The Salton lake in California salinity

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The material discusses several solution to reduce the salinity of The Salton Lake in California. While the reading suggests various solutions for this problem, the listening challenges these solutions and says that they are not realistic or practical. First, the author mentions that takes out salt from the lake by desaliniation facilities could control sallt level of the lake. On the other hand, the professor opposes this and claims that this solution could cause serious problems. The lecturer adds that pumped water in desalination facilities would evaporate and leave behind other solid materials. Furthermore, the speaker adds that these materials are chemically toxic, such as silinum. The lecturer explains that if the wind spread these toxic chemicals to the air, people could breath it and lead to serious health problems. Second, the listening states that dilute water's lake with water from the ocean could decrease lake's salinity. On the contrary, the professor contradicts this and contends that this approach reqiuire specific pipelines or canals. The lecturer adds thate local government does n ot have resources to pay for it. Moreover, the speaker points out that the distance to the ocean is one hundred kilometer away, so it will be very expensive solution. Third, the author posits that building up walls to divide the lake into several section could control lake's salt level. Conversely, the professor refutes this and mentions that this solution would not work for long time. The lecturer explains that this area could have intense geologoical activities, such as earthquake. the speaker adds that if the walls would be collapsed by an earthquake, the water in the high salinity section will mix up with the water with low salinity level.
The material discusses several
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solution
to
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reduce
the salinity of The Salton
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Lake
in California. While the reading suggests various
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solutions
for this problem, the listening challenges these
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solutions
and says that they are not realistic or practical.

First
, the author mentions that takes out salt from the
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lake
by
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desaliniation
facilities could control
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sallt
level of the
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lake
.
On the other hand
, the professor opposes this and claims that this
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solution
could cause serious problems. The
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lecturer
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adds
that pumped
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water
in desalination facilities would evaporate and
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leave
behind other solid materials.
Furthermore
, the speaker
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adds
that these materials are
chemically
toxic, such as
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silinum
. The
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lecturer
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explains
that if the wind spread these toxic chemicals to the air,
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people
could
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breath
it and lead to serious health problems.

Second, the listening states that dilute water's
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lake
with
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water
from the ocean could decrease lake's salinity.
On the contrary
, the professor contradicts this and contends that this approach
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reqiuire
specific pipelines or canals. The
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lecturer
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adds
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thate
local
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government
does
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n ot
have resources to pay for it.
Moreover
, the speaker points out that the distance to the ocean is one hundred
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kilometer
away,
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so
it will be
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very
expensive solution.

Third, the author posits that building up walls to divide the
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lake
into
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several section
could control lake's salt level.
Conversely
, the professor refutes this and mentions that this
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solution
would not work for long time. The
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lecturer
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explains
that this area could have intense
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geologoical
activities, such as earthquake.
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the
speaker
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adds
that if the walls would
be collapsed
by an earthquake, the
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water
in the high salinity section will mix up with the
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water
with low salinity level.
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IELTS essay tpo 54 The Salton lake in California salinity

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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