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TPO-36 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to finish a project completely and then begin another project than to work on two or more projects at the same time. Use specific reasons and examples to su v.1

TPO-36 - Independent Writing Task It is better to finish a project completely and then begin another project than to work on two or more projects at the same time. Use specific reasons and examples to su v. 1
Contrary to early days, the kids of this generation are inclined to spend their free time indoors with electronic equipment like computers and TVs as opposed to outdoor activities. Such a lack of exterior recreation can be hazardous to both the child's health and social life. I believe that children should always be encouraged to go out and indulge in physical activities rather than being stuck up behind closed doors. Some problems that can arise due to this dependency on electronic machines are health-related, like eye problems and obesity while some can cause mental issues as well, that can result in the child getting discouraged from going out and meeting others. If the child is discouraged from being social at such an early age, it can negatively impact multiple facets of life including education. Another concern that makes us lift our eyebrows is, frankly, the inability to restrict children from accessing inappropriate websites. Exposure to certain material at very early ages has known to ruin the lives of many children, already. One possible solution to this would be to incorporate a leisure time in school where the kids must be taken outside and shown the greatness in outdoor sports. Exposing the kids to team sports can greatly influence their social life by allowing them to work as a team. Parents should also take it upon themselves to make their children involve in exterior activities. Measures should be taken to ensure that the child has enough physical activity and outdoor exercise. In conclusion, I would say that having outdoor leisure times is key to ensure betterment. Schools and parents should understand this importance firsthand, and must put an exuberant effort in imparting this knowledge to the children.
Contrary to early days, the kids of this generation
are inclined
to spend their free time indoors with electronic equipment like computers and TVs as opposed to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outdoor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
. Such a lack of exterior recreation can be hazardous to both the child's health and social life. I believe that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
should always
be encouraged
to go out and indulge in physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
rather
than
being stuck
up behind closed doors.

This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Some
problems that can arise due to this dependency on electronic machines are health-related, like eye problems and obesity while
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
can cause mental issues
as well
, that can result in the child getting discouraged from going out and meeting others. If the child
is discouraged
from being social at such an early age, it can
negatively
impact multiple facets of life including education. Another concern that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
us lift our eyebrows is,
frankly
, the inability to restrict
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
from accessing inappropriate websites. Exposure to certain material at
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
early ages has known to ruin the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
, already.

One possible solution to this would be to incorporate a leisure time in school where the kids
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be taken
outside and shown the greatness in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outdoor
sports. Exposing the kids to team sports can
greatly
influence their social life by allowing them to work as a team. Parents should
also
take it upon themselves to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
involve in exterior
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activities
. Measures should
be taken
to ensure that the child has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
physical
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
activity
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outdoor
exercise.

In conclusion
, I would say that having
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
outdoor
leisure times is key to ensure betterment. Schools and parents should understand this importance firsthand, and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
put an exuberant effort in imparting this knowledge to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO-36 - Independent Writing Task It is better to finish a project completely and then begin another project than to work on two or more projects at the same time. Use specific reasons and examples to su v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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