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TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v.2

TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2
With the rapid development of society, more and more elites are required for advance science and technology. so how to improve the quality of higher education becomes an emergency problem for universities. improve the facilities and equipments, design attracting courses, introducing famous professors, elevate salaries for professors or provide more resources for students like holding international communicating meetings, all these strategies will solve the problem. so I think universities should prefer to taking multiple methods to improve the quality of education rather than just spending money on professors. As a boast enrollment in universities nowadays, there are so many students attend college that will require more funding and resource. universities should employ more faculties, purchase more facilities to cope with the increase population in campus. Only that happens that every student will get equal chance to gain knowledge and share the colorful campus life. For instance, when I was a fresh student in my college, owing to so many students want to study in library that I need get up early and rush the way to get a seat. Limited seats in the library influences students' study passion which leads to the decline of the quality of education in the end. so I think the most important thing to improve quality of education is to make the facilities prefect. what' s more, universities should hold some international communicating meetings and introduce professors who are talented, knowledgeable and prestigious. S o students can have more opportunities to share the advanced achievements directly and communicate with the professors who are famous in their interested field. I think that will inspire students' creativity, intelligence and imagination which need in the college study, then they will contribute more to the university and the society. Admittedly, universities should increase the salaries for professors. A college teacher is more responsible for the quality of education because college life maybe the last stage of students' study period before taking a job. what can a student do depend on what knowledge and skills they gained from school and from professors. so professors will be more dedicated to their work with high pay which lead to more useful people graduate from school. All in all, if universities have enough money they should take variety ways to improve the quality of education, especially what I mentioned above.
With the rapid development of society, more and more elites
are required
for advance science and technology.
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so
how to
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improve
the
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quality
of higher
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education
becomes an emergency problem for
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universities
.
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improve
the facilities and equipments, design attracting courses, introducing
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famous
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professors
, elevate salaries for
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professors
or provide more resources for
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students
like holding international communicating meetings, all these strategies will solve the problem.
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so
I
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think
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universities
should prefer to
Did you mean "take"?
taking
multiple methods to
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improve
the
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quality
of
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education
rather
than
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just
spending money on professors.

As a boast enrollment in
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universities
nowadays, there are
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so
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many
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students
attend college that will require more funding and resource.
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universities
should employ more faculties,
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purchase
more facilities to cope with the increase population in campus.
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Only
that happens that every
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student
will
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get
equal chance to gain knowledge and share the colorful campus life.
For instance
, when I was a fresh
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student
in my college, owing to
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so
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many
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students
want to
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study
in library that I need
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get
up early and rush the way to
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get
a seat. Limited seats in the library influences
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students&
#039;
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study
passion which leads to the decline of the
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quality
of
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education
in the
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end
.
Use a comma before 'so' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
so
I
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think
the most
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important
thing to
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improve
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quality
of
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education
is to
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make
the
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facilities
prefect.

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what&
#039; s more,
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universities
should hold
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some
international communicating meetings and introduce
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professors
who
are talented
, knowledgeable and prestigious. S o
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students
can have more opportunities to share the advanced achievements
directly
and communicate with the
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professors
who are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
in their interested field. I
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think
that will inspire
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students&
#039; creativity, intelligence and imagination which need in the college
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study
, then they will contribute more to the
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university
and the society.

Admittedly
,
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universities
should increase the salaries for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
professors
. A college teacher is more responsible for the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of
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education
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because
college life maybe the last stage of
Possible spelling mistake found.
students&
#039;
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study
period
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before
taking a job.
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what
can a
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student
do depend on what knowledge and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
they gained from school and from
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professors
.
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so
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professors
will be more dedicated to their work with high pay which lead to more useful
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
graduate from school.

All in all, if
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universities
have
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enough
money they should take variety ways to
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improve
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
education
,
especially
what I mentioned above.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes

IELTS essay TPO-29 - Independent Writing Task To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
387 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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