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Children should never be educated at home by their parents Do you agree or disagree Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this v.2

Children should never be educated at home by their parents Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this v. 2
A growing number of people believe that parents are not ideal for providing education to their children. I am totally in favour of this idea. This essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks for youngsters who plan to follow this type of system with relevant examples. Let us begin by looking at an advantage of giving education at home by parents. Feeling comfortable and sounding confident by youngsters are by far the most important positive of it. It is well known to everyone that the caregivers gain considerable experience in child' s development. Needless to say, they know how to deal with their loved ones better than anyone, which can prove advantageous for tutoring them. Despite the unnecessary demands of kids, guardians are found to express genuine affections and become unduly lenient. As a consequence, teenagers feel very ecstatic and remain utterly determined. Unlike in schools, teachers may hand out punishments and get bullied by classmates for showing the similar necessities as in the home. Nevertheless, I would argue that pupils tend to be deprived of social skills, discipline and the rest others and eventually might end in failure if the youths received learning from their parents in the bosom. This can be exemplified by the lack of peers who would otherwise usually participate in detailed discussions and encourage in an effective team work. Making matters worse, the little ones usually show lax disciplines owing to the exhibition of exemplary behaviours from the begetters, so the majority of them disappointingly result in breakdowns. In addition, knowledge demonstrated by the forebearers are nowhere near as vast as the teachers because they may not show profound knowledge in various subjects as history, maths and science. In conclusion, there are highest possibilities that the children become unimaginative, relaxed and along with others at home education. Thus, this type of teaching by parents ought to be discouraged.
A growing number of
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people
believe that
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parents
are not ideal for providing education to their children. I am
totally
in
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favour
of this
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idea
. This essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks for youngsters who plan to follow this type of system with relevant examples.

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us
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begin
by looking at an advantage of giving education at home by
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parents
. Feeling comfortable and sounding confident by youngsters are by far the most
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important
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positive
of it. It is well known to everyone that the caregivers gain considerable experience in
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child&
#039; s development. Needless to say, they know how to deal with their
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loved
ones better than anyone, which can prove advantageous for tutoring them. Despite the unnecessary demands of kids, guardians
are found
to express genuine affections and become
unduly
lenient. As a consequence,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
feel
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very
ecstatic and remain
utterly
determined. Unlike in schools, teachers may hand out punishments and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
bullied by classmates for showing the similar necessities as in the home.

Nevertheless
, I would argue that pupils tend to
be deprived
of social
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skills
, discipline and the rest others and
eventually
might
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end
in failure if the youths received learning from their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
in the bosom. This can
be exemplified
by the lack of peers who would
otherwise
usually
participate in detailed discussions and encourage in an effective team work. Making matters worse, the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
ones
usually
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
lax disciplines owing to the exhibition of exemplary
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behaviours
from the begetters,
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so
the majority of them
disappointingly
result in breakdowns.
In addition
, knowledge demonstrated by the
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forebearers
are nowhere near as vast as the teachers
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because
they may not
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show
profound knowledge in various subjects as history,
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maths
and science.

In conclusion
, there are
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highest
possibilities that the children become unimaginative, relaxed and along with others at home education.
Thus
, this type of teaching by
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parents
ought to
be discouraged
.
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4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
Change your language and you change your thoughts.
Karl Albrecht

IELTS essay Children should never be educated at home by their parents Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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