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tpo 28 Robert Peary's trip to the North Pole

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The material discusses if Robert E. Peary reached the North pole or not. While the reading claims three pieces of evidence that he indeed reached the North Pole, the listening challenges all this evidence and says that they are inconvincing. First, the author states that the National Geographic Society made a committee and declared that Peary had persuasive documents confirmed that he reached the North Pole. On the other hand, the professor opposes this and points out that this committee was not completely objective, since it was formed from Peary's close friends. Furthermore, the lecturer adds that this investigation lasted after two days, so it did not examine everything properly. The speaker adds that this committee was biased and not trustworthy. Second, the writer posits that Peary could reach the North Pole in thirty-seven days, since the British explorer Tom Avery made the same trip in less than 37 days under the same condition. On the contrary, the professor encounters this and cites that it is true that Avery reached the North Pole in less than 37 days with the same sled, but his sled was not carrying food. The lecturer explains that his food was dropped by an airplane. Moreover, the speaker adds that Avery traveled during more favorable weather made his trip much way easier than Peary's trip. Third, the reading brings up that Peary's photographs could be used to calculate the sun's position in the sky. Conversely, the professor contradicts this and contends that Peary used a primitive camera, so the phots were fussy and can not establish the sun's position precisely. Furthermore, the lecturer points out that these photos faded and worn over time, so they were blurred and could not give confident evidence.
The material discusses if Robert E. Peary
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reached
the
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North
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pole
or not. While the reading claims three pieces of evidence that he
indeed
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reached
the
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North
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Pole
, the listening challenges all this evidence and says that they are
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inconvincing
.

First
, the author states that the National Geographic Society made a committee and declared that Peary had persuasive documents confirmed that he
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reached
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
North
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Pole
.
On the other hand
, the professor opposes this and points out that this committee was not completely objective, since it
was formed
from Peary's close friends.
Furthermore
, the lecturer
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adds
that this investigation lasted after two days,
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so
it did not examine everything
properly
. The speaker
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
adds
that this committee
was biased
and not trustworthy.

Second, the writer posits that Peary could reach the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
North
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Pole
in thirty-seven days, since the British explorer Tom Avery made the same trip in less than 37 days under the same condition.
On the contrary
, the professor encounters this and cites that it is true that Avery
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reached
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
North
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Pole
in less than 37 days with the same sled,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
his sled was not carrying food. The lecturer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explains
that his food
was dropped
by an airplane.
Moreover
, the speaker
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
adds
that Avery traveled during more favorable weather made his trip much way easier than Peary's trip.

Third, the reading brings up that Peary's photographs could be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to calculate the sun's position in the sky.
Conversely
, the professor contradicts this and contends that Peary
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
a primitive camera,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
the
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phots
were fussy and can not establish the sun's position
precisely
.
Furthermore
, the lecturer points out that these photos faded and worn over time,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they
were blurred
and could not give confident evidence.
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IELTS essay tpo 28 Robert Peary's trip to the North Pole

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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