Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

tpo 39 the mass extinction during the end of the Triassic peroid

tpo 39 the mass extinction during the end of the Triassic peroid wBmKr
The material discusses the possible causes of the mass extinction that happened at the end of the Triassic period. While the reading suggests three explanations of this phenomenon, the listening challenges all these theories and states that they are not convincing. First, the author mentions that this extinction happened due to the change of sea level that destroyed all species that lived on the coast. On the other hand, the professor opposes this and points out that there was a fluctuation that happened at the sea level, but usually, the species that habituated the coast and shallow water adapted any environmental changes that happened gradually. The lecturer brings up that the change that was in the sea level during the end of the Triassic period occurred gradually, so it could not cause this aggressive extinction. Second, the writer states that the extreme cooling climate that happened due to volcanic activity devastated many species because it released a huge amount of sulfur dioxide that reduced the global temperature. On the contrary, the lecturer encounters this and posits that sulfur dioxide released from volcanic activity stayed in the atmosphere for a short period. According to the listening, sulfur dioxide was cleared out from the atmosphere by combining with water and fell as rains. The lecture says that sulfur dioxide did not stay long enough to cause a massive cooling climate that led to this extinction. Third, the reading cites that an asteroid hit the Earth and threw a lot of debris in the atmosphere that blocked the sunlight and killed many animals and plants. Conversely, the professor contradicts this and contends that when an asteroid hits the Earth, it causes carter. The lecturer argues that they did not find any carter that dated back to the end of Triassic period. the professor explains that the only carter that had been found dated back twelve million years before the Triassic period, so it is too long before extinction to do anything with it.
The material discusses the possible
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
causes
of the mass extinction that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happened
at the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the Triassic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
period
. While the reading suggests three explanations of this phenomenon, the listening challenges all these theories and states that they are not convincing.

First
, the author mentions that this extinction
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happened
due to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
of sea level that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
destroyed
all species that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lived
on the coast.
On the other hand
, the professor opposes this and points out that there was a fluctuation that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happened
at the sea level,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
usually
, the species that habituated the coast and shallow water adapted any environmental
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happened
gradually
. The lecturer brings up that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
that was in the sea level during the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of the Triassic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
period
occurred
gradually
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
it could not
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cause
this aggressive extinction.

Second, the writer states that the extreme cooling climate that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
happened
due to volcanic activity devastated
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
species
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it released a huge amount of sulfur dioxide that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
the global temperature.
On the contrary
, the lecturer encounters this and posits that sulfur dioxide released from volcanic activity stayed in the atmosphere for a short
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
period
. According to the listening, sulfur dioxide
was cleared
out from the atmosphere by combining with water and fell as rains. The lecture says that sulfur dioxide did not stay long
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cause
a massive cooling climate that led to this extinction.

Third, the reading cites that an asteroid hit the Earth and threw
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
debris in the atmosphere that blocked the sunlight and killed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
animals and plants.
Conversely
, the professor contradicts this and contends that when an asteroid hits the Earth, it
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
causes
carter. The lecturer argues that they did not find any carter that dated back to the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
of Triassic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
period
.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
the
professor
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explains
that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
carter that had
been found
dated back twelve million years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
the Triassic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
period
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
it is too long
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
extinction to do anything with it.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay tpo 39 the mass extinction during the end of the Triassic peroid

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
330 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts
  • 6.5band
    Some people believe that it is a waste of time to read read newspapers and watch news on televison.
    Attempting to balance between being knowledgeable by newsmedia and not seemingly overwhelmed and doubtful by it can be burdensome especially during a global crisis. The reasons behind this are the constant exposure of people to sensational or disastrous reporting and the declining credibility of som...
  • 6band
    tpo 27 the causes of the Litte Ice Age
    The material discusses the possible causes of the Little Ice Age. While the reading suggests three theories that might trigger this phenomenon, the listening challenges all these theories and mentions that they are out-of-date, and there is new information that may account for Little Ice Age. First...
  • 6band
    tpo 43 how agnostids lived and they behaved
    The material discusses how agnostids ate and how they behaved. While the reading suggests three theories about that, the listening challenges this and claims that each one of these three theories has a serious weakness. First, the author states that since agnostids were a type of primitive arthropo...
  • 6band
    tpo 22 using ethanol as an alternative to gasoline
    The material discusses the concept of using ethanol as an alternative to gasoline. While the reading claims that ethanol fuel is not a good replacement, the listening challenges this and states that ethanol is a good alternative and all the reasons mention in the reading passages are not convincing....
  • 6.5band
    tpo 16 the archaeology field declining in Britain
    The material discusses the science of archaeology in Britain. While the reading claims that this filed faced many problems and limitations, the listening challenges this and points out that in 1990 new rules and guidelines have been issued to change the whole archaeology in Britain and made it bette...
  • 6.5band
    Integrated essay: Reinaissence
    The lecture and the article talk about the renaissance and the artistic expression of that era. While the article gives all the credit to Michelangelo work on the renaissance era, the professor casts doubt about it and gives reasons to support his opinion. To begin with, the professor has mentioned...





Get more results for topic:
  • tpo 39 the mass extinction during the end of the Triassic peroid