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Topic: The reason why more and more people are learning English

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becoming more and more ubiquitous in our daily
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lives
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people
contact.
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directly
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people
choose to
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keep
in touch with others thanks to the
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help
of powerful tools
namely
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Zalo
, Twitter, …
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While
this substitute has certain benefits, I would content that they
are eclipsed
by more potential drawbacks.

On the one hand, the striking development of
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social
networking sites provide a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
chance for users and their relatives to
easily
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get
access. Regardless of graphic locations, staying connected with
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loved
ones is not a matter of time and expense
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campared
to the traditional methods of meeting and conversing with them. Making
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of video call features, texting of Skype, Facebook
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can
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keep
in contact with families and friends
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in an easy way
.

On the other hand
, the
increasingly
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use
of
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social
media apps does more harm than
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good
.
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of paying attention and care for
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people
around, the addicted
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being glued
to the screens to interact via messages with icon showing their emotion. It is a common sense that misunderstanding is not
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media
negatively
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affected
the style of writing, the youth are not
fully
aware of
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social
etiquette and netiquette when writing formal emails. The
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teenagers
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use
abbreviated words as regular. They are lacking of interpersonal
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skills
,
therefore
they have difficulty in making face-to-face conversation, even a brief talk. It is a compelling reason why there has been an
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unprecended
paradox: Internet
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overusers
always feel the growth of sadness and loneliness,
easily
suffer from depression and autism in
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today
’s
widely
connected world.

In conclusion
, although several advantages can
be derived
from
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social
network, I hold a strong belief that they are far
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outweighted
by
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numorous
glaring downsides. It’s
highly
recommended that humans should spend more quality time on real interaction.
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IELTS essay Topic: The reason why more and more people are learning English

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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