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Topic: Some people think that natural disasters are inevitable, while others argue they can be avoided.

Topic: Some people think that natural disasters are inevitable, while others argue they can be avoided. qV1DX
On a daily basis natural disasters occur occasionally. last night this incident happened in my area. The natural disaster change around territory of Bukhara that is to say several parts of Bukhara were damaged by the natural disaster. For example: some trees broke, fruits spilled, some roofs of houses flew away, buildings were damaged and other different things were harmed. Some people think that natural disasters are inevitable, while others argue they can be avoided. That's true. Because there are both sides of the theme. Thus, now I bring up this subject. The first important thing I should mention is that natural disasters are a danger to process. Without a shadow of doubt, I can say that most of the people come up with that natural disasters very dangerous and inevitable. truth to be told, I think so too. On the other hand, we should not worry this incident. In other word we could avoided this incident that is to say we should watch whether forecast from on TV and we should take precautions against this situation. In the light of these facts, my point is that we must be prepared for any disasters that may occur at any time. As I have mentioned above we ought to always protect ourselves from various disasters! !
On a daily basis
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natural
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disasters
occur
occasionally
.
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last
night this incident happened in my area. The
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natural
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disaster
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change
around territory of Bukhara
that is
to say several parts of Bukhara
were damaged
by the
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natural
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disaster
.
For example
:
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some
trees broke, fruits spilled,
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some
roofs of
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houses
flew away, buildings
were damaged
and
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other
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different
things
were harmed
.
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Some
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people
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think
that
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natural
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disasters
are inevitable, while others argue they can
be avoided
. That's true.
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Because
there are both sides of the theme.
Thus
,
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now
I bring up this subject.

The
first
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important
thing I should mention is that
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natural
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disasters
are a
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danger
to process. Without a shadow of doubt, I can say that most of the
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people
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come
up with that
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natural
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disasters
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very
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dangerous
and inevitable.
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truth
to be
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told
, I
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think
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so
too.

On the
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other
hand, we should not worry this incident. In
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other
word we could
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avoided
this incident
that is
to say we should
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watch
whether forecast from on
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TV and
we should take precautions against this situation.

In the light of these facts, my point is that we
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must
be prepared
for any
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disasters
that may occur at any time. As I have mentioned above we ought to always protect ourselves from various
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disasters
! !
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IELTS essay Topic: Some people think that natural disasters are inevitable, while others argue they can be avoided.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
215 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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