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Topic sentence: Living in a city has a number of drawbacks Problem 1: There is the problem of traffic jams and traffic accidents.

Topic sentence: Living in a city has a number of drawbacks Problem 1: There is the problem of traffic jams and traffic accidents. PR7xj
Living in a city has a number of drawbacks and traffic problems is one of the most serious problems in big cities that people have to deal in daily life. The first problem is about traffic jams, it happen when there are too many transports moving on a road, and it often occurs in rush hours. Another factor is poor infrastructure, for example, many streets is usually flooded when it has heavy rain and making it difficult to move or the roads are too narrow to travel easily. With that traffic conditions, accident is object to happen. But the main reason that cause these problem that’s people are not respect and don’t follow the traffic rules.
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IELTS essay Topic sentence: Living in a city has a number of drawbacks Problem 1: There is the problem of traffic jams and traffic accidents.

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  American English
1 paragraphs
116 words
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