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Topic – Many species of animal has become extinct in today’s time .What are the reason for this behavior and what solution you suggest .

Topic – Many species of animal has become extinct in today’s time. What are the reason for this behavior and what solution you suggest. PrQDX
When the earth was born, the first living thing to come here were the animals, who created this exquisite world. As evolution took place human came into nature, with the increasing demand and population they started to exploit the nature, they have hunted animals for their, they have taken their homes as a result many species have vanished from our earth. Certainly, there are multiple causes for this problem, one of the major causes is population growth. As human existence has increased, grass lands which are the home for various animals are now converted into City centers, flats and industrial area. In addition to this pollution also plays a vital role in this. Marine animals are the one’s who have got trapped under this plastic pollution and toxic gases. As the industries are increasing they emit harmful gases and send their garbage into the river, ocean, ponds and pool which are home of aquatic animals such as fish, turtle, dolphins etc. . They eat plastic and drink this toxic water which leads to death of these species. Moreover, Cows and buffalo’s eat waste thrown on roads, sometimes they end up eating plastic, it being a non- biodegradable substance it stays in their stomach which causes various dieses. Furthermore, killing of animal for personal use also lead to diminishment of animals. Murdering of snake for their leather, bear, goat and sheep for their fur, elephant for their teeth, lion to show your strength, tiger for making mats and deer for their horns. There are certain steps to be taken in care to save the animals. Primary, usage of plastic bags needs to be banded completely, travelling by bicycle, carpool and using public transportation along with this banning of 5 g network tower can reduce pollution and can save various birds and animal from getting extinct. In recent news veteran actor Juhi Chawla has filled against the reliance Jio to stop planting 5g network tower as the rays they emit are harmful for various birds. Industrial waste needs to be recycled and segregated. Deforestation needs to be stopped and the forest needs to be converted in national park. Moreover, poaching of animal should be stooped and the one who do this should be heavenly fine. I would like to suggest law against poaching should be made Also government should take some legal action against the industries who are polluting the nature. To conclude, I would say the mother earth belong to every flora and fauna present. We homosapiens should keep this in mind and appreciate the fact that they too have a right to live.
When the earth
was born
, the
first
living thing to
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come
here were the
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animals
,
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who
created this exquisite world. As evolution took place human came into nature, with the increasing demand and population they
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started
to exploit the nature, they have hunted
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animals
for their, they have taken their homes
as a result
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many
species have vanished from our earth.

Certainly
, there are multiple causes for this problem, one of the major causes is population growth. As human existence has increased, grass lands which are the home for
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various
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animals
are
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now
converted into City centers, flats and industrial area.
In addition
to this pollution
also
plays a vital role in this. Marine
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animals
are the one’s
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who
have
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got
trapped under this
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plastic
pollution and toxic gases. As the industries are increasing they emit harmful gases and
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send
their garbage into the river, ocean, ponds and pool which are home of aquatic
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animals
such as fish, turtle, dolphins etc.
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.
They eat
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plastic
and drink this toxic water which leads to death of these species.
Moreover
, Cows and buffalo’s eat waste thrown on roads,
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sometimes
they
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end
up eating
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plastic
, it being a non- biodegradable substance it stays in their stomach which causes
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various
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dieses
.
Furthermore
, killing of
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animal
for personal
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use
also
lead to diminishment of
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animals
. Murdering of snake for their leather, bear, goat and sheep for their fur, elephant for their teeth, lion to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
your strength, tiger for making mats and deer for their horns.

There are certain steps to
be taken
in care to save the
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animals
. Primary, usage of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
plastic
bags
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needs
to
be banded
completely, travelling by bicycle, carpool and using public transportation along with this banning of 5 g network tower can
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reduce
pollution and can save
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various
birds and
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animal
from getting extinct. In recent news veteran actor
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Juhi
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Chawla
has filled against the reliance
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Jio
to
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stop
planting 5g network tower as the rays they emit are harmful for
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various
birds. Industrial waste
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needs
to
be recycled
and segregated. Deforestation
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needs
to be
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stopped
and the forest
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needs
to
be converted
in national park.
Moreover
, poaching of
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animal
should
be stooped
and the one
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who
do this should be heavenly fine.

I would like to suggest law against poaching should
be made
Also
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government
should take
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some
legal action against the industries
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who
are polluting the nature.

To conclude
, I would say the mother earth belong to every flora and fauna present. We
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homosapiens
should
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keep
this in mind and appreciate the fact that they too have a right to
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live
.
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IELTS essay Topic – Many species of animal has become extinct in today’s time. What are the reason for this behavior and what solution you suggest.

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