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Throughout this essay, I will explore the advantages and disadvantages for this trend and express my own opinion on the matter.

Throughout this essay, I will explore the advantages and disadvantages for this trend and express my own opinion on the matter. kLy98
In modern society, the general public is buying more leisure and luxury products than ever before. Throughout this essay, I will explore the advantages and disadvantages for this trend and express my own opinion on the matter. Firstly, I will discuss the negatives of people buying more consumer goods and secondly, I will share the positives of this trend. Many consumer goods do not give any real benefit to the person who has bought them. Moreover, these purchased items may cost the consumer a substantial sum of money, possibly causing stress over personal finances. For example, many of these goods could be bought with loans, or other types of credit, which may not always be paid back due to lack of funds or other financial commitments. On top of that, household appliances such as TVs and air conditioners need a lot of energy to be powered. As a result of this, the individual will find they are again having to balance more bills and commitments than is achievable. On the other hand, jewelry and fashion give many people great happiness. Furthermore, if people have enough disposable income to spend on luxury items that make them happy, then that should be their personal choice. If a person has enough money for an iPad without getting into debt, then they should be free to buy that item. Many people feel they should also support certain companies and buy their products. As a result of this, the producers of consumer goods can employ large numbers of people, giving them jobs and financial support. In conclusion, there are many benefits and negatives in people purchasing more consumer goods. In my opinion, overall the increase is a positive thing, as it shows that more people have disposable income to spend on items they truly like.
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is buying more leisure and luxury products than ever
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. Throughout this essay, I will explore the advantages and disadvantages for this trend and express my
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own
opinion on the matter.
Firstly
, I will discuss the negatives of
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people
buying more
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consumer
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goods
and
secondly
, I will share the positives of this trend.

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Many
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consumer
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goods
do not give any real benefit to the person who has
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bought
them.
Moreover
, these
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purchased
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items
may cost the
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consumer
a substantial sum of money,
possibly
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stress
over personal finances.
For example
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of these
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goods
could be
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with loans, or other types of credit, which may not always
be paid
back due to lack of funds or other financial commitments.
On top of that
, household appliances such as TVs and air conditioners need
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a lot of
energy to
be powered
.
As a result
of this, the individual will find they are again having to balance more bills and commitments than is achievable.

On the other hand
, jewelry and fashion give
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people
great happiness.
Furthermore
, if
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have
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enough
disposable income to spend on luxury
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items
that
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make
them happy, then that should be their personal choice. If a person has
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enough
money for an iPad without getting into debt, then they should be free to
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buy
that
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.
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people
feel they should
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support certain
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companies
and
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buy
their products.
As a result
of this, the producers of
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consumer
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goods
can employ large numbers of
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people
, giving them jobs and financial support.

In conclusion
, there are
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many
benefits and negatives in
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people
purchasing more
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consumer
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goods
. In my opinion,
overall
the increase is a
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positive
thing, as it
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shows
that more
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people
have disposable income to spend on
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items
they
truly
like.
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IELTS essay Throughout this essay, I will explore the advantages and disadvantages for this trend and express my own opinion on the matter.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
6.5
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