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TOPIC # 38 learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

TOPIC # 38 learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. v. 2
How we are today is the result of our past actions and decisions, and it is kind of our identity. So it makes no sense to completely forget about the past. I am positive that learning about both our own past days and history are rewarding. I feel this way because our past lights up our future path, the history informs us about our country, and it revives the fading traditions and customs. First, according to George Santayana “those who not remember the past are condemned to repeat it”. More or less, we all believe in this quote as in every sensitive and important situation, we either unconsciously or deliberately, recall our previous experiences, and review them. Or we even ask others for their similar experiences so as not repeat our or others’ previous mistakes, and to make the best decision out of them. Even children learn from their past. For example a child who has a bitter memory of hot iron, he understands that it burns so he will not approach it anymore. Second, the history is a written narration of true stories from our country and our ancestors. Relating the wars, natural disasters, epidemics, and other troubles that our people were facing during different eras. It describes the ancient cruel monarchs ruling our country and the heroes opposing them. We also come to know that how extensive our lands were in the past and how they was separated by intruders. For instance, by studying the history I get to know that Iran was a few times bigger than what it is now prior to the Qajar domination. Third, being aware of history helps to preserve our traditions and culture which most of them are now going to be forgotten forever. These are peculiar costumes that differentiate nationalities from each other and make the world an interesting place to live. Without them we are all the same. So it is better to learn about history even for the sake of our own culture and conventions. As a whole, I believe it is quite necessary for us to learn from the past and about the past. It will bring many goods for us. This is because it warns us not to repeat mistakes, it informs us about the history of our nation, and it maintains our traditions.
How we are
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today
is the result of our
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past
actions and decisions, and it is kind of our identity.
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So
it
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makes
no sense to completely forget about the
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past
. I am
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positive
that learning about both our
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own
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past
days and
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history
are rewarding. I feel this way
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because
our
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past
lights up our future path, the
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history
informs us about our country, and it revives the fading traditions and customs.

First
, according to George Santayana “those who not remember the
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past
are condemned
to repeat it”. More or less, we all believe in this quote as in every sensitive and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
situation, we either
unconsciously
or
deliberately
, recall our previous experiences, and review them. Or we even ask others for their similar experiences
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so
as not repeat our or others’ previous mistakes, and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the best decision out of them. Even children learn from their
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past
.
For example
a child who has a bitter memory of hot iron, he understands that it burns
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so
he will not approach it anymore.

Second, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
history
is a written narration of true stories from our country and our ancestors. Relating the wars, natural disasters, epidemics, and
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other
troubles that our
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people
were facing during
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different
eras. It
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describes
the ancient cruel monarchs ruling our country and the heroes opposing them. We
also
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come
to know that how extensive our lands were in the
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past
and how they
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was
separated by intruders.
For instance
, by studying the
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history
I
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get
to know that Iran was a few times bigger than what it is
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now
prior to the
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Qajar
domination.

Third, being aware of
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history
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helps
to preserve our traditions and culture which most of them are
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now
going to
be forgotten
forever. These are peculiar costumes that differentiate nationalities from each
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other
and
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make
the world an interesting place to
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live
. Without them we are all the same.
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So
it is better to learn about
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history
even for the sake of our
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own
culture and conventions.

As a whole, I believe it is quite necessary for us to learn from the
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past
and about the
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past
. It will bring
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many
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goods
for us. This is
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because
it warns us not to repeat mistakes, it informs us about the
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history
of our nation, and it maintains our traditions.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay TOPIC # 38 learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
387 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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