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TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 3 - The computer department is considering a scheduling change. Explain the man’s opinion of the change and reasons he gives for holding that opinion. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Sec v.1

TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 3 - The computer department is considering a scheduling change. Explain the man’s opinion of the change and reasons he gives for holding that opinion. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Sec v. 1
These days most people want to get their work done almost instantly. They don’t have the time or patience to wait. Right now, right here is the motto. I attribute this change in attitude to the development in technology, especially internet and mobile technology and, in my opinion, it can be positive and negative at the same time. No other technology has had a greater impact on our lives than the internet technology. To say that the internet revolutionized our lives is an understatement. It has made it possible for us to perform just about anything with a few clicks of a button. It allows us to book tickets online, buy things and pay bills anytime and from anywhere. Gone are the days when we had to stand in a long queue to buy railway tickets or pay utility bills. All of those mundane tasks can now be performed within a few seconds. The biggest advantage of the internet is that we can carry it around because it works on a variety of devices of all sizes and shapes. Obviously, it is quite normal for a generation that grew up using the internet from their childhood to want to get everything done in seconds. However, this insistence on getting instant support or response can be positive or negative depending upon our access to technology. The internet has certainly made our lives comfortable and faster. It has allowed us to save a lot time. However, like any other technology, the internet technology can also fail us from time to time. Connection speeds vary from place to place. Also, the reliability is not the same throughout the day. It is not uncommon for people addicted to instant gratification to panic when they lose connectivity. This is a common problem when city people visit rural areas where the internet is either slow or inaccessible. To conclude, if the present generation wants to get everything done instantly, that is because they grew up using the internet technology. While this trend is largely positive, in my opinion, over dependence on anything is bad.
These days most
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people
want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
their work done almost
instantly
. They don’t have the
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time
or patience to wait. Right
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
, right here is the motto. I attribute this
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
in attitude to the development in
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technology
,
especially
internet and mobile
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
and, in my opinion, it can be
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positive
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
at the same time.

No other
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technology
has had a greater impact on our
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lives
than the internet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
. To say that the internet revolutionized our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
is an understatement. It has made it possible for us to perform
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
about anything with a few clicks of a button. It
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allows
us to book tickets online,
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buy
things and pay bills anytime and from anywhere. Gone
Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: "is".
are
the days when we had to stand in a long queue to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
railway tickets or pay utility bills. All of those mundane tasks can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
be performed
within a few seconds. The biggest advantage of the internet is that we can carry it around
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it works on a variety of devices of all sizes and shapes.
Obviously
, it is quite normal for a generation that grew up using the internet from their childhood to want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
everything done in seconds.

However
, this insistence on getting instant support or response can be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
or
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
depending upon our access to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
. The internet has
certainly
made our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
comfortable and faster. It has
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
allowed
us to save a lot
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
.
However
, like any other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
, the internet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
can
also
fail us from
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
. Connection speeds vary from place to place.
Also
, the reliability is not the same throughout the day. It is not uncommon for
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
addicted to instant gratification to panic when they lose connectivity. This is a common problem when city
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
visit rural areas where the internet is either slow or inaccessible.

To conclude
, if the present generation wants to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
everything done
instantly
,
that is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they grew up using the internet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
. While this trend is
largely
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
, in my opinion, over dependence on anything is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay TOEFL Integrated speaking, question 3 - The computer department is considering a scheduling change. Explain the man’s opinion of the change and reasons he gives for holding that opinion. - Preparation Time: 30 SecondsResponse Time: 60 Sec v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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