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Today’s fresh food like vegetables or fruits travels thousands of miles from the rural areas or farms before it reaches customers in cities or urban areas. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative trend?

Today’s fresh food like vegetables or fruits travels thousands of miles from the rural areas or farms before it reaches customers in cities or urban areas. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative trend? GRAo
Human beings nowadays are benefited from cutting-edge technology in agribusiness. People can mostly enjoy vegetables and fruits without having a chance to observe their origins thanks to improvements in transportation, lower price and specialized agricultural areas. This might lead to some more pollution and difficulties to maintain quality of those vegan, raw foods, but the revenue and development in agribusiness are far more worthy. Transportation needs many factors to become as advanced as it is at the present. Firstly, it is obvious that foods are now carried by a much more advanced logistic system than before. The modified trucks can provide a longer period of on-road storage, developed highways also enable vehicles to travel faster. Therefore, vegan, raw foods can be transported to a much further from their crops. Secondly, to meet the demand of high-quality product, corporations have to specialize their farms so that they establish specialized agriculture zones, each will grow some particular vegetables or fruits. Those areas need to be distanced from rural areas to save labour and rental cost so that the potential profit can rise significantly. This can be viewed as a negative trend because more pollution is released into the air and the product quality is harder to ensure. Nevertheless, it is more wise to consider its impacts as advantages. It is clear that agriculture will improve tremendously thanks to the centralized farming. Farmers have more chance to cooperate with each other, agricultural suppliers will reach to their customers easier, larger stocks can be built to store harvested crops. Crops also bring huge revenue if they are transported far away to regions where the demand is high. Reversely, chances are brought to consumers who wants to try vegetables and fruits that they would never locally see. In conclusion, the innovations in logistics and emerging agriculture areas has enabled human beings to enjoy vegetables and fruits which were distantly grown. There are some negative impacts that need to be restrained. However, improvement in crop farming, huge profits and more access to vegan raw foods, clearly confirm that this trend is beneficial
Human beings nowadays
are benefited
from cutting-edge technology in agribusiness.
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People
can
mostly
enjoy
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vegetables
and
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fruits
without having a chance to observe their origins thanks to improvements in transportation, lower price and specialized agricultural
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areas
. This

might lead to
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some
more pollution and difficulties to maintain quality of those vegan, raw

foods,
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but


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the
revenue and development in agribusiness are far more worthy.

Transportation needs
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many
factors to become as advanced

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as
it is at the present.
Firstly
, it is obvious that foods are
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now
carried by a much more advanced logistic system than
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before
. The modified trucks can provide a longer
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period


of on-road storage, developed highways
also


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enable
vehicles to travel faster.
Therefore
, vegan, raw

foods can
be transported
to
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a much
further


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from
their crops.
Secondly
, to
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meet
the demand of high-quality product, corporations
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have to
specialize their farms
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so
that they establish specialized agriculture zones, each will grow
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some
particular
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vegetables
or
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fruits
. Those
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areas
need to
be distanced
from rural
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areas
to save
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labour
and rental cost
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so
that the potential profit can rise
significantly
.

This

can
be viewed
as a
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negative
trend
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because
more pollution
is released
into the air and the product quality is

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harder
to ensure.
Nevertheless
, it is more wise

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to
consider its impacts as advantages. It is
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clear
that agriculture will
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improve
tremendously
thanks to the centralized farming. Farmers have more chance to cooperate with each other, agricultural suppliers will reach to their customers easier, larger stocks can
be built
to store harvested crops. Crops
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also


bring huge revenue if they
are transported
far away

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to
regions where the demand is high.
Reversely
, chances
are brought
to consumers who
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wants
to try
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vegetables
and
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fruits
that they would never
locally
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see
.

In conclusion
, the innovations in logistics

and emerging agriculture
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areas
has enabled

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human
beings to enjoy
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vegetables
and
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fruits
which were
distantly
grown. There are
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some
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negative
impacts that need to
be restrained
.
However
, improvement in crop

farming, huge profits and more access to vegan raw foods,
clearly


confirm that this

trend is beneficial
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IELTS essay Today’s fresh food like vegetables or fruits travels thousands of miles from the rural areas or farms before it reaches customers in cities or urban areas. Why is this? Is this a positive or negative trend?

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