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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Advertising has been very popular today. It is very simple way to attract people buying their products and is has been a major leading companies in the following years. Advertising is a simple trick to make people easily and believe to buy their products. Nowadays, advertising can be done in websites, Tvs, through salesman and popular buildings. It is has been very common and a simple way to communicate people directly. Innocent people get fooled easily, for their products and colourful ads By advertising beauty products, we get attracted to models shown in ads and make us buy their products and wish become like them. For example fairness creams, showing that using their creams can make them fair in one week. Many popular companies such as Fair & Lovely was banned for its name for showing colour discrimination amoung people. Another example are hair colours such as hair colour shampoos and influence people that in one hair wash can change their but people do not realise the harmful chemical substance added which damages their hair even more. Another leading advertising products are ayurveda and homeopathy medicines. people tend to buying these products showing a discount prices and special offers but intake of medicines without a doctors suggestion. In my opinion, I would disagree the extent of sales through advertising The result of using these products damage our health with no benefit out if it. This would change the perspective of thinking and also makes people blindly buying products without knowledge.
Advertising has been
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today
. It is
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very
simple way to attract
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people
buying their
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products
and
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is has
been a major leading
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companies
in the following years. Advertising is a simple trick to
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make
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people
easily
and believe to
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buy
their products.

Nowadays, advertising can
be done
in websites,
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Tvs
, through salesman and popular buildings. It
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is has
been
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very
common and a simple way to communicate
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people
directly
. Innocent
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people
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get
fooled
easily
, for their
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products
and
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colourful
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ads


By advertising beauty
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products
, we
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get
attracted to models shown in ads and
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make
us
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buy
their
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products
and wish become like them.
For example
fairness creams, showing that using their creams can
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make
them
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fair
in one week.
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Many
popular
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companies
such as
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Fair
& Lovely
was banned
for its name for showing
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colour
discrimination
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amoung
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people
. Another example are
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hair
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colours
such as
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hair
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colour
shampoos and influence
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people
that in one
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hair
wash can
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change
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their
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people
do not
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realise
the harmful chemical substance
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added
which damages their
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hair
even more. Another leading advertising
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products
are
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ayurveda
and homeopathy medicines.
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people
tend to buying these
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products
showing a discount prices and special offers
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but
intake of medicines without a
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doctors
suggestion.

In my opinion, I would disagree the extent of sales through advertising The result of using these
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products
damage our health with no benefit out if it. This would
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change
the perspective of thinking and
also
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makes
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people
blindly
buying
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products
without knowledge.
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IELTS essay Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
250 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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