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Today, newspapers and televisions are giving detailed descriptions on crimes. Some people believe such a practice will cause bad consequences and thus media should be restricted. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Today, newspapers and televisions are giving detailed descriptions on crimes. Some people believe such a practice will cause bad consequences and thus media should be restricted. 6dqdK
On the one hand, there are many negative effects from publishing brutal news. Firstly, presenting all kinds of bad behaviors from the media can emphasis people to follow these ads. Raping, murdering and stealing which can be easily seen on TV and newspapers can impress young people, who are not mature enough, to imitate them. Watching cruel can also introduce people to learn and understand in some criminals details which can lead to encourage them to doing crimes and violence, consequently. Moreover, after watching these bad examples for a long time, it can affect to moral and emotional controlling in a person. People, who perceive only aggressive behaviors, will more likely to follow immoral actions, violent and aggressive behaviors can be easily happened in a society these days. On the other hand, some people assert that the media can help to teach and prevent bad behaviors in a society for a number of reasons. Firstly, broadcasting negative news usually demonstrates all the facts of crimes such as prompt and outcome which can instruct the effects from doing crimes to a public. People will realize about being criminals, can lead to committee strong sentences or punishments later. The awareness of cruel activities will put into peoples’ perspective and it can help to prevent from doing crimes. Lastly, the media also can help to catch murders because many audiences will be able to recognize murder’s appearance after watching news from TV. In conclusion, in my perspective, if the media present negative information excessively, people will be more understand about criminals’ tricks or some inappropriate behaviors and want to pursue these actions without carefully thought. Therefore, it would be a great regulation to restrict the broadcasting of cruel information to a public. Hopefully, the number of young people, who misunderstand about criminals are good role models to copy, will decrease.
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effects from publishing brutal news.
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bad
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behaviors
from the
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media
can emphasis
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people
to follow these ads. Raping, murdering and stealing which can be
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on TV and newspapers can impress young
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people
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, to imitate them. Watching cruel can
also
introduce
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people
to learn and understand in
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criminals
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details
which can lead to encourage them to
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crimes
and violence,
consequently
.
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bad
examples for a long time, it can affect to moral and emotional controlling in a person.
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, who perceive
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, will more likely to follow immoral actions, violent and aggressive
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behaviors
can be
easily
happened in a society these days.

On the other hand
,
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assert that the
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behaviors
in a society for a number of reasons.
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, broadcasting
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news
usually
demonstrates all the facts of
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crimes
such as prompt and outcome which can instruct the effects from doing
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crimes
to a public.
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will realize about being
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criminals
, can lead to committee strong sentences or punishments later. The awareness of cruel activities will put into
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peoples’
perspective and it can
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.
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also
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to catch murders
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audiences will be able to recognize murder’s appearance after watching news from TV.

In conclusion
, in my perspective, if the
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present
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negative
information
excessively
,
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people
will be more understand about
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criminals’
tricks or
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inappropriate
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behaviors
and want to pursue these actions without
carefully
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.
Therefore
, it would be a great regulation to restrict the broadcasting of cruel information to a public.
Hopefully
, the number of young
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people
, who misunderstand about
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criminals
are
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role models to copy, will decrease.
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IELTS essay Today, newspapers and televisions are giving detailed descriptions on crimes. Some people believe such a practice will cause bad consequences and thus media should be restricted.

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307 words
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