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Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller? Kwo33
Nowadays, people tend to like traveling more as compared to the past. This essay will articulate some of its benefits such as advancement in technology and how it helps the people to live a happy life in following paragraphs. First of all, because of the Morden technology and gadgets it is immensely easy to travel in different parts of the world. In order words, in the present time due to the availability of various forms of transportation such as airplans, buses, ships and cars people really enjoy to travel. For instance, as it cost less to hire any type of transport services while compared to past and even due to the fact that there are much few hindrance present in the way. Therefore, it is seen that there is a gigantic increase in the percentage of people who travel. Furthermore, travelling can be seen as an vital activity in the lifestyle of the people. To explicate it, travelling play a crucial part in providing entertainment and enjoyment. To exemplify, it can be called as a medicine which helps a person to heal-up by reducing the stress by giving some quality time. Thus, it assist to cope many health Hassel's by relaxing the person. To conclude, because of the following advantages that travelling delivers to the people in numerous ways the ratio of travellers have been rising rapidly from a long time.
Nowadays,
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tend to like traveling more
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compared to the past. This essay will articulate
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some
of its benefits such as advancement in technology and how it
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helps
the
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people
to
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live
a happy life in following paragraphs.

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First of all
,
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because
of the
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Morden
technology and gadgets it is
immensely
easy to travel in
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different
parts of the world. In order words, in the present time due to the availability of various forms of transportation such as
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airplans
, buses, ships and cars
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people
really
enjoy to travel.
For instance
, as it cost less to hire any type of transport services while compared to past and even due to the fact that there are much few hindrance present in the way.
Therefore
, it is
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seen
that there is a gigantic increase in the percentage of
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people
who travel.

Furthermore
, travelling can be
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seen
as
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an
vital activity in the lifestyle of the
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people
. To explicate it, travelling play a crucial part in providing entertainment and enjoyment. To exemplify, it can
be called
as a medicine which
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helps
a person to heal-up by reducing the
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stress
by giving
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some
quality time.
Thus
, it
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assist
to cope
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many health
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Hassel
's by relaxing the person.

To conclude
,
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because
of the following advantages that travelling delivers to the
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people
in numerous ways the ratio of
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travellers
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have
been rising
rapidly
from a long time.
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IELTS essay Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveller?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
231 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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