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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v.7

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 7
In the contemporary era, most visitors adore travelling to locations with predicament conditions, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic. Commuting to such places has various merits and demerits for the sightseers. This essay initially talks about the adventure lovers who visit for numerous attractions and food varieties and then in the later part it will talk about the conditions that might affect the health, travel and communication creating more difficulties. On the one hand, there are certain advantages of travelling to such locations. Firstly, it is helpful for the adventurous folks who love to explore new avenues and for those who like to take the captivating pictures. Secondly, many masses are also interested in a variety of foods offered by the residents and might love to try the local dishes. Finally, most visitors travel for attractions, which provides certain cultural or historical background. For instance, Desert safari is famous in the locations with deserts and tourists love to visit such sights. On the other hand, there are a few disadvantages to visiting places with difficult conditions. First and foremost, it has a different climate from the place where tourists have come from and thus can affect their health. It might be easier to manage things for the adults but juvenile and elderly might find it difficult to survive. In addition, commuting and communication can both become an issue, which can hamper the plans of the visitors. For instance, more snowfall can hinder the tourist movement and they might have to reschedule their plans. To conclude, most visitors love to travel places with difficult conditions for fulfilling their adventurous desires but they also have to face few problems, which might obstruct their travel plans.
In the contemporary era, most
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visitors
adore travelling to locations with predicament conditions, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic. Commuting to such
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places
has various merits and demerits for the sightseers. This essay
initially
talks about the adventure lovers who visit for numerous attractions and food varieties and then in the later part it will talk about the conditions that
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might
affect the health,
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travel
and communication creating more difficulties.

On the one hand, there are certain advantages of travelling to such locations.
Firstly
, it is helpful for the adventurous folks who
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love
to explore new avenues and for those who like to take the captivating pictures.
Secondly
,
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many
masses are
also
interested in a variety of foods offered by the residents and
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might
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love
to try the local dishes.
Finally
, most
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visitors
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travel
for attractions, which provides certain cultural or historical background.
For instance
, Desert safari is
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famous
in the locations with deserts and tourists
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love
to visit such sights.

On the other hand
, there are a few disadvantages to visiting
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places
with difficult conditions.
First
and foremost, it has a
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different
climate from the
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place
where tourists have
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come
from and
thus
can affect their health. It
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might
be easier to manage things for the adults
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but
juvenile and elderly
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might
find it difficult to survive.
In addition
, commuting and communication can both become an issue, which can hamper the plans of the
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visitors
.
For instance
, more snowfall can hinder the tourist
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movement and
they
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might
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have to
reschedule their plans.

To conclude
, most
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visitors
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love
to
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travel
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places
with difficult conditions for fulfilling their adventurous desires
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but
they
also
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have to
face few problems, which
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might
obstruct their
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travel
plans.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
22Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic? What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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