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Today, more and more people are obese, especially in Western countries and the US. Therefore, obesity is seen as disease of century XXI. My essay below will analyze both the causes and solutions of the goverment and individuals to this concern.

Today, more and more people are obese, especially in Western countries and the US. Therefore, obesity is seen as disease of century XXI. My essay below will analyze both the causes and solutions of the goverment and individuals to this concern. xO2g9
Today, more and more people are obese, especially in Western countries and the US. Therefore, obesity is seen as disease of century XXI. My essay below will analyze both the causes and solutions of the goverment and individuals to this concern. A lot of people being obese is caused by several factors. The first reason is that many people do not have healthy dietary routines and do not exercise regularly. In this day and age, people spend many time on working, therefore, fast food and processed food in the supermarket is the preferred choice. In addition, although they are harmful for people's health, they are so delicious, hence, many people can not crub their appetite while they are hungry. Moreover, also due to too much work to do, they do not have time to go to the gym room. Absorbing a lot of calories but do not burning it will make people be obese. There are two main solutions to this problem. Firstly, people should restrict food which is damage for the health of them. Instead of this, they should eat more fresh fruit, vegetables, protein rich food which provide nutrients and limit obesity. These will help people to have good eating rountine. In addition, the government also should organize some social compaigns about health. They may hold sports events in order to encourage the residents to do exercises more. In conclusion, there are two main contributors to be obese and several solutions are suggested to put an end to the situation
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people
do not have healthy dietary routines and do not exercise
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people
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food
and processed
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in the supermarket is the preferred choice.
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people
's health, they are
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calories
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people
be obese.

There are two main solutions to this problem.
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,
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people
should restrict
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food
which is damage for the health of them.
Instead
of this, they should eat more fresh fruit, vegetables, protein rich
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food
which provide nutrients and limit obesity. These will
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help
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people
to have
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good
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.
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some
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compaigns
about health. They may hold sports
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events
in order to encourage the residents to do exercises more.

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, there are two main contributors to be obese and several solutions
are suggested
to put an
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end
to the situation
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IELTS essay Today, more and more people are obese, especially in Western countries and the US. Therefore, obesity is seen as disease of century XXI. My essay below will analyze both the causes and solutions of the goverment and individuals to this concern.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
5.5
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