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Today many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and little time on sports. Why is it? Is it a positive or negative development?

Today many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and little time on sports. Why is it? Is it a positive or negative development? BJ786

An increasing number of children spend more time on online games instead of outdoor sports. In my opinion, this is a negative affect, and it can lead to harmful situations and problems in future. Also there are some reason that why they prefer computer games. To begin with, computer based games has number of attractive factors that provoke young ones to play them. One of the reason is role play as per choice. Online games provide an opportunity to children to select the role of their choice, and to select the material and method also which they want to play. In result, their mind push them towards visual sports. Moreover,

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 of outdoor sports. In my opinion, this is a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 affect, and it can lead to harmful situations and problems Did you mean: "in the future"?in the future
in future
. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Also,
Also
 there are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 reason that why they prefer computer games.

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begin
 with, computer based games has number of attractive factors that provoke young ones to play them. One of the reason is This word is normally spelled with hyphen.role-play
role play
 as per choice. Online games provide an opportunity to children to select the role of their choice, and to select the material and method also
 which they want to play. In result, their mind push them towards visual sports. Moreover
, 