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Today, many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and less time on sports why? Is it a positive or a negative development.

Children are like clay, which can be moulded in anyway. Majority of adolescents spend a lot of time on playing sports and less time on outdoor activities. There are many reasons behind it. personally, I corroborate it is a negative trend. To begin with, there are myriad of reasons to shore light upon given proclivity. To plunge into, the most intrinsic one is that these days children are technology oriented. To justify, in contemporary era, mostly kids time spend on mobile phones and other technological gadgets. No matter what the age is children know each and every feature of mobile phones and technology.

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 kids time spend on mobile phones and other technological gadgets. No matter what the age is children know each and every feature of mobile phones and technology. 