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Today, it is considered that, home schooling was accepted as a method of education. And a plethora of parents prefer to home schooling than public or state schools. In my view, the drawbacks of this issue outweigh the benefits. There are some people who support home schooling, and they are considered that this method has benefits for child’s growth. Foremost, families have more control on their children, and a child who study at home can get a more attention from parents, so they have a good academic results. As an illustration, research shows that in 2012, grade point average of children who studied at home was higher than previous years. Secondly, another positive point is related to saving time and energy. It is supposed that the time and energy which is spent on commuting from home to school and reversely can be devoted to more important works such as doing homework, going in for sports and playing music intruments. Conversely, opponents argue that, benefits of going to school are

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