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Today I am going to talk to you about dream job

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In modern society, there are many things to help the country develop. I think health is an important factor of a developing country and doctors will be the people who live for people to ensure their health. I want to be an adult doctor because I want to cure people. When I was a child, I saw him often sick, so I resolved to become a doctor who could care for people like him. Every day in addition to the knowledge learned in school, I often read more medical books and search the internet. The more I learn, the more I love this profession. I knew that in order to achieve my dream, I had to study hard. . If you want to be a doctor, you have to go to college for at least 11 years or maybe even a lifetime. In the future, I can apply to the University of Medicine and Pharmacy in Ho Chi Minh City. In the future, I hope to become a good doctor to help people and the country.
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IELTS essay Today I am going to talk to you about dream job

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
176 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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