Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

To have locks or cameras in our apparment

Both options have some advantages, and I can see why some people have chosen option B. On the whole, however, I would like to choose option A. On one hand, having a new lock for an individual apartment will be the secure option, as nowadays we have got many varieties of smart locks like one where it gets unlock by giving our biometrics or another option is where we need to set a password to unlock. Additionally, this type of smart lock can log the information and who all have accessed it, and also, they are many apps where we can control this lock using our smart mobile. If we want to change the password or biometrics we can do it remotely. On other hand, our apartment is in the main area that has already got two cameras near the entrance and each floor has cameras installed. Moreover, the problem with the security cameras is they do not actually prevent a crime. If there is any crime or theft it will help to track down the perpetrator. Whereas having a lock will help to prevent from theft happening. Considering this reason, I think having locks would be a better option for our apartment. All will feel safe and secure. Again, this is my personal opinion, but, I will support whatever the management decides.
Both
options
have
some
advantages, and I can
see
why
some
people
have chosen
option
B.
On the whole
,
however
, I would like to choose
option
A.

On one hand, having a new
lock
for an individual apartment will be the secure
option
, as nowadays we have
got
many
varieties of smart
locks
like one where it
gets
unlock by giving our biometrics or another
option
is where we need to set a password to unlock.
Additionally
, this type of smart
lock
can log the information and who all have accessed it, and
also
, they are
many
apps where we can control this
lock
using our smart mobile. If we want to
change
the password or biometrics we can do it
remotely
.

On other hand, our apartment is in the main area that has already
got
two cameras near the entrance and each floor has cameras installed.
Moreover
, the problem with the security cameras is they do not actually
prevent
a crime. If there is any crime or theft it will
help
to
track
down the perpetrator.
Whereas
having a
lock
will
help
to
prevent
from theft happening.

Considering this reason, I
think
having
locks
would be a better
option
for our apartment. All will feel safe and secure. Again, this is my personal opinion,
but
, I will support whatever the management decides.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay To have locks or cameras in our apparment

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
223 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts