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To describe a party which occured in your course

To describe a party which occured in your course RWydM
Nowadays, such kind of parties are being organized frequently. We also took part in a party, we celebrated New Year in Today Education. To be honest, it is vital, you may ask "why? " I will explain later. So, it was on Saturday, the party was exciting, everyone enjoyed and showed us their scenes. In the middle of the party our first teacher came, and joined us. At the end of the party we all ate cakes and teachers congratulated all students. Right, others may say that the New Year is not muslims' party but I have heard, the New Year is just the end of the year. Anyway, it is not my business to discuss the religions. It is time to explain why the parties are important. First, students can enjoy, at the same time they can learn speaking beside guests, improve their self-confidence, social skills. To sum up, I would recommend you to organize not suspicious parties. . . Good bye have a good day.
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frequently
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took part
in a
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party
, we celebrated New
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Year
in
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Today
Education. To be honest, it is vital, you may ask
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why?
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explain
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So
, it was on Saturday, the
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party
was exciting, everyone enjoyed and
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showed
us their scenes. In the middle of the
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party
our
first
teacher came, and
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joined
us. At the
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end
of the
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party
we all ate cakes and teachers congratulated all students. Right, others may say that the New
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Year
is not
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muslims
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party
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but
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Year
is
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just
the
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end
of the
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year
. Anyway, it is not my business to discuss the religions. It is time to
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explain
why the
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parties
are
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important
.
First
, students can enjoy, at the same time they can learn speaking beside guests,
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improve
their self-confidence, social
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skills
. To sum up, I would recommend you to organize not suspicious
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parties
.
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.
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.
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good
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IELTS essay To describe a party which occured in your course

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
167 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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