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This is the first time that I have written my diary in English

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This is the first time that I have written my diary in English. I have never intended to write about it since I was born in 2003. I thought that thing would never happen because I would have to write, think, read, and speak everything fully in English. Fortunately, I realized that English is not only the language to communicate with friends all around the world, but also the tool to access modern global society. Talking about the benefits of learning English is endless, so I will start by writing my individual diary on 18/10/2021. Yep, let's start. The first is in the morning. I wake up at about 6, but I usually get out of bed at 9. Then I brush my teeth, wash my face, and I can also take a shower. Next, I have breakfast before going back to my room to study. As you know, Monday is the first day of the week. So I will definitely prepare assignments for lessons tomorrow. Yep, since I became a student at university. I'm very busy as a bee with a mountain of homework. Let me see, I studied till 12. Then I have lunch with my family before resting. In the afternoon, I began to do housework to help my mother while my father was planting a lot of flowers and vegetables on the balcony. In the evening, everyone gathered together for the meal and could say anything about that day, like what happened. Yep, I think it's essential to connect all the members of the family. Nevertheless, I argued with my mom, so I didnt tell her till the end of the day.
This is the
first
time that I have written my diary in English. I have never intended to write about it since I
was born
in 2003. I
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thought
that thing would never happen
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because
I would
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have to
write,
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think
, read, and speak everything
fully
in English.
Fortunately
, I realized that English is not
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only
the language to communicate with friends all around the world,
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but
also
the tool to access modern global society. Talking about the benefits of learning English is endless,
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so
I will
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start
by writing my individual diary on 18/10/2021. Yep,
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let
's
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start
. The
first
is in the morning. I wake up at about 6,
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but
I
usually
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get
out of bed at 9. Then I brush my teeth, wash my face, and I can
also
take a shower.
Next
, I have breakfast
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before
going back to my room to study. As you know, Monday is the
first
day of the week.
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So
I will definitely prepare assignments for lessons tomorrow. Yep, since I became a student at university. I'm
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
busy as a bee with a mountain of homework.
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Let
me
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see
, I studied till 12. Then I have lunch with my family
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before
resting. In the afternoon, I began to do housework to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
my mother while my father was planting
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a lot of
flowers and vegetables on the balcony. In the evening, everyone gathered together for the meal and could say anything about that day, like what happened. Yep, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
it's essential to connect all the members of the family.
Nevertheless
, I argued with my mom,
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so
I
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didnt
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tell
her till the
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end
of the day.
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IELTS essay This is the first time that I have written my diary in English

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
276 words
6.0
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