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In recent years, people started to feel unsafe wherever they are including their houses or outside. This essay will discuss two main causes as the effects of social media and increasing crime rates. This essay also suggests solutions to these problems that can be implemented by authorities' precautions and self-direction. First of all, in today’s world, it’s clear to say that most of the people living for exist in their social media accounts. This situation basically occurs because of a basic human instinct that needs attraction. For having this, people are creating their own persona which is really far from the person who really is, and standardize some appearance standards which causes people to feel unsafe. For example, due to the fact that cheating profiles in social media apps, Norway execute a rule for using stickers on photos to state that photos are doctored. After a while, they observed people started to share their own views rather than their persona. So this example shows us, authorities' precautions are standing on an important point to solve the social media problem. This essay discussed how the growing use of social media and uncontrollable violence can bring about insecure thoughts. This essay also stated that solutions are these problems are twofold: government should carve out strict rules through campaigns and prohibitions and people should spare time to understand and find their inner self.
In recent years,
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people
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started
to feel unsafe wherever they are including their
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houses
or outside. This
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will discuss two main causes as the effects of
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social
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media
and increasing crime rates. This
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essay
also
suggests solutions to these problems that can
be implemented
by authorities' precautions and self-direction.

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clear
to say that most of the
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people
living for exist in their
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social
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media
accounts. This situation
basically
occurs
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because
of a basic human instinct that needs attraction. For having this,
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people
are creating their
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own
persona which is
really
far from the person who
really
is, and standardize
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some
appearance standards which causes
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people
to feel unsafe.
For example
, due to the fact that cheating profiles in
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social
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media
apps, Norway
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rule
for using stickers on photos to state that photos
are doctored
. After a while, they observed
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people
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started
to share their
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own
views
rather
than their persona.
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So
this example
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us, authorities' precautions are standing on an
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important
point to solve the
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social
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media
problem.

This
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essay
discussed how the growing
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use
of
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social
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media
and uncontrollable violence can bring about insecure thoughts. This
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essay
also
stated that solutions are these problems are twofold:
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government
should carve out strict
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rules
through campaigns and prohibitions and
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people
should spare time to understand and find their inner self.
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IELTS essay This essay will discuss two main causes

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
230 words
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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